This is spot-on in characterization and dialog (er... not that they say anything, to each other, that is). I'd never thought of those two together, but it does make sense. Thanks for writing this gem of a story!

This is really cute. I'm not really a Rayne shipper, but this was really well written. "Vera approves, and she and I have an understanding when it comes to those who would threaten our man" is an amazing last line.

I love where this is heading. Wish you had kept it going. hope to see you write for for this fandom!

this was a wonderful start. it flowed nicely and natural like. I just wish it was formated a little cleaner with the lines spaced out a bit more.

Don't know why i didn't review this before; not a whole lot left to say after everyone else's input, i guess. But I love their respective voices, and your interpretations of them. I can actually hear them speaking as i read. Well done. 3

The ending line of this short yet very deep little story is phenomenal. I can just see River and Vera acting as one, on defense, and the "Vera approves" is the most perfect bringing to life of that pivotal object in the lives of Serenity's crew that I have yet read. I can't begin to describe the sudden smile that last sentence brought to my face.

Great job with Jayne's voice! Thanks for the good read.

Sweet! Nice counterpoint to the first chapter. Got a real way with words, homeric.

You sure have a talent for capturing a character :) Makes me want to see what you'd be like with ones you invented! Write anything on fictionpress by any chance?

Excellent second chapter :)

Oh. You are most excellent!

Loved the "Little tiny things keeping little tiny people alive in the black, and all with different colours."

Im so impressed how you really managed to capture River's unique way of looking at things and expressing herself.

I could never manage that. :)

Yay for River and Vera having an understanding. XD

Like the thoughts of River and Jayne. Almost poetic.

Ah, brilliant! I'm so glad you wrote a second part to this, as it makes what Jayne was thinking so much clearer. And no-one is hurting anyone else because they are a pair, a bright, shiny binary star revolving around each other. And the last line? Genius.

Love it!

You kept them both in character and i love how you told it!

Wonderful! :)

sad, but beautiful.

Oh Gods, I love Jayne.

That man is just damned sexy. The idea of River and Vera conspiring... was just fantastic. Love it.

The end seemed kind of sad though. :(

Made me want to hug him.