Hi, I just thought I'd say how interesting I find your story. The only thing I would have to be negitive about is the actual writing set-up, (I'm not saying it's bad at all though! It's great!)

Also, on another note, don't listen to Onomatopoetic. I recently today also not a nasty review from this person, they also placed me in his/her/it's "Torchwood Badfic" community. Whatever you do, DON'T let this poor excuse for a person put you down on your writing. At least you are willing to post your work, whilst they have not posted any but enjoy saying bad things about everyone elses work. Check out their profile if you don't believe me and look at the communities part. He/she/it's listed over 300 stories that are deemed "bad", many of them great stories. What I'm saying is, don't let people like that put you down and keep writing!

-Camden

Damn woman! i can't believe you don't write this kind of stuff more often!.. LOVE IT!

This is very poorly written.

love the story diva... and can't wait for the next chapter