I love the plot but the story is a mess, like in chapter 22 for example why is kikyo in sesshomaru castle with kagome and rest of the gang while Kagura is back with Naraku. It doesn't make sense since kagura help kagome escape in previous chapters while kikyo left with naraku when both kagome and kagura combine attack wounded him. You need to seriously rewrite the whole story .

Very good story 80 starrs

I like the story. It really is good. But the chapters could be a little longer. And there is a lot of spelling errors. I don't hate it, I love it, it's so cute, and i'm wondering why no one has killed Kikyo yet. Lol I hate Kikyo.

This was a great story. I just request you go back and read it to fix the miss wording and miss spelling.

This story wad awesome and i know the sequal will be just as great ;)

You should re-read your story some of the sentences don't make since.

Please get a beta. This story is too rushed; I couldn't even finish this chapter. Falling in love in two weeks isn't realistic. Having Kagome jump from one brother to another in that time span is also unrealistic. This could be a good story. You should just go back, add some details, expand some points, and repost.

I'm sorry this moved so fast that it made it unreadable. I got up to the beginning second chapter and i just can't read anymore because i'm so confused

I'm soooooooooooooooo confused here. Kagura helped kagome escape. And she was in the castle staying with them to see the ceremony. How did she end back up with Natalya. And kikyo tab off with Naraku breaking his heart. What the hell is she doing back with inuyasha?! This is so jumpy. U should really think ur stories through before you write them. This one was just... Blahhhhh. I'm sorry.

Honestly I couldn't get past the fourth chapter. The story is rushed and the bad spelling and grammar makes me want to punch myself. The characters from your story do not resemble the ones from the manga/anime at all which is alright I suppose. However it is mighty annoying. It has the potential to become a great story though. Don't let my review stop you from writing more stories because you may be able to improve your writing. Good luck!

O ok you know you added kikyo to kagomes group and kagura to narukos i thought it was the other way around?

Thank you! There's someone who actually thought of using his tensaiga on Kohaku. I liked the story but it was just plain confusing once you wrote ch.22. First off Kagura gets her heart and helps Kagome escape from Naraku. She even protects her from Koga, Naraku, and Kikyo. She joins there group and Kagura and Sango start to become friends. She fights along side Inuyasha against those snake demons during the mating ceremony! We also find out Naraku and Kikyo are lovers. Inuyasha's heart broken. Later Kagura's back on Naraku's side and Kikyo's back with Inuyasha and somehow ends up sharing a room with him in the castle. Also what's with Sesshoumaru saying that Inuyasha doesn't break promises and he will follow through with his promise to protect Kagome? In ch.1 He freaking told Kikyo that he would kill Kagome! That's how she ended up with Sesshoumaru in the first place! The story is pretty cool but ch.22-26 completely contradicts the first 21 chapters you wrote.

What I want to know is why, in the Sesshoumaru x Kagome stories, the hell doesn't Kagome take the jewel from Kohaku and tell Sesshoumaru to use tenseiga(sp?)on him. And in the anime, during the times they had access to Kahaku, I don't know why they don't knock him out and Kagome doesn't put a purified shard in him and take out the tainted one. That way he's still alive and not under Naraku's control.

I'd love to finish reading this, it's a good idea, but your grammar is horrible! you need someone to edit your story for you.

plz dont leave the story like this! plz put out a 2nd story contuing this one! plz plz plz plz because its so good, it had lots of mistakes but as i said it is really good so kep going 4 us fans out there! XD