Please update soon. GREAT story!

Now this girl i'm diggin...can hold her own when push comes to shove and for once she isn't the drooly girl i see so much can't wait to see what happens next chika

Really good! Update soon por favor!

Great story. I can't wait for the update. As everyone else has said, you definitely have the characters down. And I looked up the Coronas and they are wonderful. As far as the Irish language goes, how wonderful that you all actually have a week to celebrate it. I'll be anxious to read more when you have time.

Love it! The beginning started out a little rough with Don barking at Ella, but knowing she is a red-head...things got a lot better when she told him what was what when he was trying to intimidate her. I can understand his "pig ignorance" but that doesn't mean I have to like it. (I love the term and will be using it in real life.) The way you introduced everyone to her was awesome! I notice that you kept Danny's glasses, THANK YOU! It is nice to see him still working from his wheel chair, I'm sure that will change soon but cool!

But my absolute favorite moment has to be when Ella meets up with Sheldon again. Very cool and spicy! They both sound like they need a bit of loving. Oh and before I forget, the little encouragement Scagnetti gave her was lovely. There are people on her side. :)

Favorite lines

"Fine by me," Flack growled. Ella couldn't help herself.

"I wasn't asking permission."

She thought she saw the ghost of a smile cross his face, but when she looked again it had been replaced by the hardened scowl she was already used to."

"Yeah, yeah, I know the drill," he grinned cheekily. "I was an ass at first but then your winning Montanan personality made me see the light and the girl behind the wheatfields."

"I said, I worked in Charlotte," she continued in a stronger voice. "And for the record, I had a good rep. One of the best in the force. So yeah, they taught me. And they taught me that witness statements can be very useful indeed, But you know that already Detective. And you know I'm right. Would it kill you to admit that I'm actually not that bad?"

"Relax, I can be very subtle when I want to be."

"Yeah, subtle like a steel freight train," Lindsay murmured.

"What was that, Montana?"

"Nothing," she replied innocently, grinning maddeningly at him."

"Ella grinned roguishly and strode up to him, sticking out her hand to grasp his. "Ella Fitzgerald, badass superhero and NYPD detective extraordinaire."

"Sheldon Hawkes," he responded, and she remembered his surname from the night before. "Crime scene investigator and rescuer of supposedly-badass detectives."

They shared a grin and a firm handshake before Sheldon broke away."

LOVE IT! haha write more pleasee :D

I think your writing is amazing, and its refreshing to see a good writer after reading so many rushed stories that dont have plots. Thank you!

:D

ah you've done it again :D

Well, since your offering our choice CSI on top, I think'll I'll pick Stella please. Lol.

But really, this was good. I like Ella as a character. I feel bad about the way Don is treating her but I think he'll warm up eventually.

You did a good job of introducing all of the characters. It's nice to see Ella get along with them. And of course I love that there is something going on bewteen her and Sheldon. It's nice to see him get some love, lol, he needs it.

Really, good job. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Update soon...pretty please, with TWO characters of your choice on top. ;)

I. LOVE. THIS. :)

Seriously, though-this story is one of the most engaging pieces I've read in a long time. Your knowledge of the CSI team really shines through in this chapter-from the overarching character traits and speech patterns (you nailed Danny to a T) to the smallest details (I loved your reference to Adam's Snow Day cigarette burn), you really did justice to everyone's characters.

And what a treat to see Ella give Flack the smackdown he needed! The "I wasn't asking permission" line was genius. I'm looking forward to seeing how that will play out in future chapters.

I think part of the reason I love the story so much is that there are so few pieces that give Hawkes a chance to shine. Your descriptions of everything from his (gorgeous!) skin to his gentle demeanor really have brought to the forefront a character we're so used to seeing in the background. And I love it!

I can't wait to read more about Ella (and her awesome closet) soon!

-Steph

I liked it. I may have to backtrack later. Good chapter.

great chapter cant wait for the next one.

Okay here is some constructive criticism...this was too short and we need more updates! I hope that didn't hurt you too badly. :D Sadly I can understand Ella's first day because all of it is eerily familar with almost being late, not knowing what to do with your hair, and the final insult...stubbing your toe when you are in a hurry.

But meeting Scagnetti more than makes up for it. God, he is a sweetie in here. I hope that she does collect that hundred, she will need it for her eventual date with Sheldon. "You'll be fine. Just ignore any crass comments, some of the guys are kinda dumb about the whole thing. But it shouldn't be too bad as long as you don't take any crap from anyone. They're used to having a sole bottle of Dom Perignon in the crate of cheap beer." I ADORE how you described Jess, and it totally fits. Again I love how Scagnetti welcomed her, she will need a friendly face until Don thaws. Great chapter!

UPDATE SOON! :D

Looking good to me! As a fellow writer of OCs, I know how tough it can be to balance showcasing the new character with the existing elements of the series. . .I think we've all had awkward first days at work, and you did an excellent job at reflecting that frantic mental whirl going on inside Ella's head.

For some reason I really loved the taxi ride, short as it was-something about the description regarding her being too excited to gaze at the NYC streets grabbed me.

And I thought your decision to have Scagnetti explain the whole Jess situation was genius-it was a nice way for you to take a scare-mentioned character and turn him into a way to push the plot forward.

Does Ella have an accent at all? I'm just curious since she's been in North Carolina. . .but I guess if she's not originally from there it wouldn't make sense for her to have one.

Can't wait to see what happens between your heroine (and our "weary with the weight of the world" detective) next! :)

GREAT job!

Sorry I missed this story earlier! I really enjoyed reading it and think you do a spendid job with details! I mostly read fanfic for DL but this story has grabbed my attention (plus I love the bit of DL you throw in! Flack shouting Mrs. Messer was so adorable _) and I hope you udate soon!