This was just a pice of crap!

you mean amnesia not abnisha I thought you were speakin latin or some vampire shit or something

You should have ended it with Charlie remembers everything and Bella gets pregnant

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You said you were redoin it a year ago! Please get it done at least! D:

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Ok, I am asking you to seriously take my advice.

You are definetly in no way cut out for writing. Maybe wait until you're a bit older. Your grammar is hard to understand, your paragraphs only fit 2 or 3 sentences, and to be honest, it is hard to believe that Edward would ever just randomly say "i've just decided to have sex with Bella now." and Bella would never be masturbating in the first place.

And you're 14? Maybe you should wait until you are old enough to write graphic and sexual stories. I doubt you even understand alot of it.

Anyway, you may be mad at me for writing this review, but it needed to be said. Sorry. But criticism is what most writers should appreciate, not hate. :/

omg i luv it t update

This was a really great story but c'mon! You have got to admit that Bella would never EVER even UTTER the word 'masterbating' in front of Charlie! But i think that's what made me laugh so nice touch! XD

right read on, lol it was amneisa lol

update? please?

pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease?

mnm x

did you mean amnesia? like memory loss cause i have no idea what that word is lol.

poor Bella and Edward!

Good chapter