SAY YES BITCH

GOSH THIS IS SUPER GOOD IMS O EXCITED!

I came here just to re read this amazing story! I hope you haven't abandoned part 2. :(

It's been years since I last read this and I stumbled upon the story on wattpad. xD So, I came back here to re-read it again! Your writing is simply amazing! :D

This story has offically become the oxygen that I breathe. So excited to see that part 2 has finally updated, since I can't seem to put my phone down.

Saw that part two of this story just updated, so I thought I should check out part one before diving into that one. I'm generally not a big fan of OCs, but I'm hoping that KC will be more relatable than Miaka as a heroine. I like that she's a little older than Miaka was in the original.

The banter between KC and her friends is cute, and I'm wondering which of them will end up taking Yui's place as the Priestess of Seiryuu. I'm guessing the Universe of the Four Gods will be waiting for KC in that dusty basement room, and then she'll meet our beloved FY characters soon thereafter.

I'm really enjoying this story so far, so prepare yourself for an influx of reviews as I make my way through it.

I have to say, this may be an "old" fic but it's still a pretty damn good one! I love your character KC. She's spunky, snarky, witty, strong willed, and flawed (but in a good way).

One of the things that I never really liked about the original anime and manga of Fushigi Yuugi was that Miaka was flawed, but in all the wrong ways. Her character was not lovable. She kept making really stupid decisions throughout the entire series and she never learned. She never really grew or developed like she should have, and her personality honestly grated on my nerves. She was not the heroine, she was a weak-willed one-dimensional character that was cast as the hero but ended up more and more often as the victim. Now that may be harsh of me to say, but that is why I like your character SO much better.

KC's weak at times, and flawed, and she makes mistakes, but already she's grown so much. She admits to her mistakes and owns up to them, like that time when Tamahome pointed out how she was treating Hotohori and she apologized to him. She's no one's victim, she can fight her own battles. She talked back at Nuriko and wouldn't let him bully her. And, even better, is how she disabused Hotohori of his notion that she was his "ideal" woman.

She may be the Priestess of Suzaku but the Priestess of Suzaku is not her. She basically told him that he's holding her on a pedestal and until he can see KC as her own person, a normal human being, she's not willing to entertain the idea of being in a relationship with him.

And even though there are times when she is weak, she recovers. And she holds her ground when she should. Your character is well written and multi-dimensional. So I would really love to read more of her story. Please update again soon! I look forward to seeing what happens next. :)

Love it! Love the added reality and the humor! Great Job! Though I'm a little sad for Hotohori now.. And truthfully, I can't picture anyone other than Miyaka and Tamahome as the leading characters for Fushigi Yuugi but you really did justice on it! Definitely one of the best Oc fics I've read! hehe

Yoy have awsome sense of humor... Ur come backs make me laugh for entire 20 mints... I am head over heels in love with this fan fic n m going to suggest this to all my friends and readers... Do update soon or i swear The curiosity will be the death of me

Sorry I didn't comment on any of the other chapters I was just so caught up in the story. I think this is amazing! I love the story it flows so well, I really enjoy reading this thanks! About to start book two! Keep writing these if you can they are FANTASTIC! LOVE to the Author!

Stormlight,

I'm very impressed! You've done a wonderful job with recreating Fushigi Yugi! I will definitely be reading Book Two after this. I'm adding you to my Favorite Author list. You earned it! Because I'm a writer myself, I'm assuming you'd appreciate some constructive criticism. I don't have an actual criticism for you, but I did catch a few errors, and let me tell you, only seven errors in twenty chapters is phenomenal for fan fiction. (True, there could be more I didn't catch, but I have fairly sharp eyes so if that's all I found...)

Ch 2. You use the word "opaque" to describe how the room disappears around KC. Opaque means "impossible to see through." Judging from the context, I think you meant "transparent" or "translucent."

Ch 4. KC thinks, "I'm going to have to start thinking up new acronyms..." An acronym is an abbreviation using the first letter of the main words. Example are NASA (National Aeronautics and Space Administration) and SNAFU (Situation Normal All Fouled Up) and PIN (Personal Identification Number). What KC realizes she needs to rethink are "idioms" and "colloquialisms" which are common sayings that don't necessarily mean what they literally say. Example: "In the doghouse" doesn't mean you're in a doghouse, rather that you're in trouble. See?

Ch 11. I quote, "Along with no small amount of released a choked-off cry..." What? Did your computer auto-save on you and not register keystrokes? Mine does it to me all the time, even though I typed the whole sentence. Also in Ch. 11, you wrote "bare the emperor an heir" but 'bare' should be 'bear.' You used the wrong form in Ch. 14, too.

Ch 12. This one's nit-picky! Sorry! "...kissing leads to othe rvery bad..." Typo for 'other' and 'very.' That's all.

Ch. 20 Hotohori plans to "renegotiate" his strategy to win KC? Renegotiate with who? I gather you really meant one of these words: reconsider, rethink, reevaluate, reexamine, or even redo.

Again, you did a great job! Take my pointers as you will. I'm off to read book two!

Sapphire

Stormlight,

I decided to read this based solely on the chapter one author's note!

You are right. The Mary Sues ARE thick on the ground around here. I'm glad I read this. I personally work my tail off to make sure my OC's don't turn into the dreaded Mary Sues, and I can tell you do, too. The first chapter didn't disappoint!

I know this story has been complete for over a year, but I've been... absent (yeah, that's a good word!) for a while. I'll review again when I've had the chance to read more.

Sapphire

Okay, totally and absolutely loved this story. I spent most of it holding my sides since I was cracking up so much from what KC would say or the interactions of the character. And oh yeah, totally into the unresolved sexual tensions between Hotohori and KC (what a lucky girl!) I'm looking forward to seeing what happens in the next book. )

KC does have a point but that won't stop me from cheering Hotohori on. He's just too cute in his own way _

Well, I'm off to Book Two! :)

Uh... I think chapter 18 got lost since this is chapter 19...