"I never intended to fight anybody, so I'll be fine. I'll stay with you all the time." Well... If that isn't a red flag that she'll find some way to wander into danger, I don't know what is. ' And I enjoyed the bit about Valerie being low-key excited that there would likely be more danger to come before their stay here was complete.
(You know something I'm pretty sure I've never mentioned. I swear, every single time I see Warui's name, I read it as Wario. And that trips me up for a second. XD)
The whole festival bit was fun. I kind of wish I had more to say. It'll certainly make for a memorable send-off, right before they leave. I liked their school days quite a bit, actually. I see, like, 50 more chapters I have to get through, so I'll be a little disappointed if they don't get to go back to school for another semester. But I suppose, if we were to trade that for a little more action... I couldn't really complain. (:
Something about the spacing was a little weird this chapter. Like there are extra line breaks mid-paragraph or something... It wasn't too distracting. Just something you might want to fix whenever you have time to go back to this chapter.

This has been a great story so far, I wonder if this is the actually the end? or are you taking a break from it. Hopefully you'll finish it. Ideally I lean towards happy endings, so I hope they figure out a way for our two girls to travel back and forth from their dimension. And they stay together with Goten and Trunks.

This fic is lame as fuck. Just fangirling about everything and a bunch of nonsense. I’d definitely say it’s fucking hard to follow.

thank you very much for expressing your feelings in this chapter I really liked it

Poor, oblivious Josie... Things seem to be going poorly with Francis too. I'd be begging for a trip off the planet after all this teen drama. I'm doubtful that you won't find a way to sneak Goten and Trunks in there somehow- and Valerie too, of course- but it would be an interesting way to shake things up... having them all separated for a more extended period of time. I'm glad Trunks and Josie finally got it all out there, though, and made up in a way that suggests they'll both be pretty cool about it from here on out. I was kind of worried they'd just swap roles, and Josie would be the one blushing every time he entered the room.
I love Goten… Have I mentioned that? Your portrayal of him, especially, is adorable. XD I loved that little scene where he's doubting how 'cruel' Josie could be. And the line where Bulma greets Goten, "grinning at Goten who was here mid-week, like a rebel" made me laugh so hard. Let's just say that I just finished a professionally published book that was also trying to be entertaining with its sassy teenage characters, and it was not written half was well as this. Casual humor, man... it's a craft.

You know... Not gonna lie... I was secretly starting to get a little tired of only hearing from the main crew and hoping some of the other characters would pop up again. ' So... It was really good to see Gohan and Videl and all again. And is that a plot I see?! Other than the usual teenage fun while they wait to be able to use the Dragon Balls, of course. I'm so excited to see where this goes! And I know no one explicitly mentioned anything about Valerie, but... I mean, if Josie's going, it's pretty much a guarantee that Val gets to go too, I'd think.
XD That was one glorious misunderstanding at the end. I'm gonna feel kinda bad if Trunks breaks up with Francis over what he thinks Josie's saying there.

You know, it's kind of funny that I was just saying in my last review how, with Val's boxing background, she might be able to (sort of) keep up physically. I really like the idea of her beating the boys at DDR. I definitely count that as a physical activity. Even if it is just because their movements are too fast for the game. And funny that you bring up discussion of Goten's weight too, and how he's a lot heavier than he looks... I'll bet they all are. There are some stories in this fandom who go pretty deep into analyzing Saiyan anatomy, and on top of all that muscle, their bone density is probably pretty crazy compared to humans' too...

I really liked the end scene with Josie. There were some... complications with my own mother. Specifically, complications with her continuing to be a part of my life around the time I was 13 on... So I really felt your little note at the end, pondering what it would be like to be so young and missing big moments with a parent that used to feel so ordinary... It was always something I mostly kept to myself, even when some of my other friends had equally troubled home lives... Anyway... I love that you're exploring it! There are so many things to think about with dimension-travelling stories... Is time passing at the same rate, for one? How irreversibly will this experience change them? Questions that probably won't be answered until the very end... assuming we even see their reunions back on their Earth and you don't end it with them being enveloped in light as they're wished back home... or something.

Oh Josie... I really relate to her... obliviousness. XD Because it's so obvious from the outside that Trunks probably isn't that bothered that she'd rather get her ASL lessons elsewhere. Clearly, he's more upset about her reaction to Bulla's Truth or Dare question. And then, of course, we get to see that he's in pretty much the same boat... I think there's an art form of sorts to writing oblivious characters- cause you've got to make sure the audience sees everything, even if they don't- and I think you've got it down.

And I liked that we got to check in with Valerie here too. Maybe it's just me, but the last few chapters have felt very... Josie-heavy. (This one still kind of was.) And I liked that we finally got more of a story as to how Valerie ended up at bootcamp. As the romance continues, that could lead to some very interesting scenes. And I'd be interested to see what Goten and Trunks made of the boxing background too! XD I feel like, whenever anything physical- or fighting, at least- comes up, I've got this image in my mind of the two girls just flailing around in the background while the Saiyans and half-Saiyans take care of everything... But Valerie at least wouldn't be completely helpless. I'd really like to see her connect with Videl, or Chi-Chi- two other perfectly capable humans who've probably felt their own skills devalued at times just because they're constantly around (and married to) this bunch.
And I loved the omake at the end! XD Looks like Josie's finally learning how to connect with Vegeta.

Bulla's getting jealous... This was another fun chapter. That ironic sort of humor that I love was back and in full blast. And I loved the scene where Josie pictures the two boys as little kids again on that race track... Because I could totally just SEE it, you know? And 'hear' their kid voices again...

I'm really interested to hear Bulla's answer- about why she's so reluctant to acknowledge her natural strength. Not that she needs it, but that could turn into a fantastic bonding moment with Vegeta, if the two other girls could convince her to train with him every once in a while. (Can you imagine the look on his face?!) And I liked how Josie got around her 'Truth'- because she really did believe she was being honest, even if it's so obvious to everyone else. And oh yeah, I think we all know Trunks had it made in this timeline. That's actually something that's really interesting to me- the differences in general disposition between Future Trunks and this timeline Trunks- especially now that I've gotten to see them interact in Super. Because... Okay, he was never THAT bad... But my impression of kid Trunks was always that he was a little spoiled and arrogant.

Absolutely love it! I literally discovered this gem a week ago and since then I have been binge reading it non stop! I love the amount of detail and thought put into it and would love to see some of my favourite characters interacting with others. I feel like you really presented Bulma and Vegeta’s relationship well and showcased how his pride works. I would love to see some more but of course if you’re busy no pressure! I love it so much and hope you continue!

Thousand years ago, when I was in my fit peak, I was so insane that whenever I've
experienced muscle soreness I felt so good about myself that I've been working out so hard that this feeling of satisfaction used to stop my brain from letting me know how much in pain I really was. Now, when I get up from chair 3 times more during my day than usuall I get soreness and I wonder how, when and why did I heal from this mental disorder that has been keeping me from feeling my weak ass body.
But how cute are these boys to take care of Josie like that? Even my mom never gave a damn about my soreness. So tell me - how can I build this world jumping machine to jump into the world where I can find a diamond boys like this?
God how I love your story... Everytime I read any chapter that came out from that beautiful, talented, brilliant brain of yours I'm so excited, this story gives me so much laughs and this warming heart feeling and always a good time!
Thank you, My Dearest, Beloved Lady Of My Life for sharing your gift with us!

XD Your comedic timing has gotten really good. Just that one paragraph where Trunks realizing that she still doesn't have the use of her vocal chords to make a sound and so she couldn't POSSIBLY give away their position... only for Josie to immediately run into a tree made me burst out laughing. And that little part about Trunks keeping the one of the notes Josie wrote... XD I just imagine now that he's kept a bunch of notes like that, which probably seem wildly inappropriate out of context... Like, I'm just waiting for a chapter where Bulla stumbles across his drawer of Josie notes now and he has some explaining to do. XD I certainly hope he kept that last one.

This one felt short... (I'm not sure why; I'm looking at the little scroll bar as I type, and I can see that it isn't... Maybe it just feels like the second half of the previous chapter. Almost like it's not its own chapter...) But I liked it. I do find it interesting to see how Vegeta's relationship with the girls is continuing and develop. And poor Frances. I don't know what Bulla has planned, but even if she doesn't do anything to interfere, it just doesn't look like things are going to go well for her and Trunks. There were just so many little... moments between him and Josie between this chapter and the last. Something about her tucking her face against his shoulder to stop her laughter was just so... intimate. Like, I love that they're getting closer. I think it's going to make it easier for them to actually get together once they do realize their feelings. But I'm definitely anticipating some bumps along the way.

...I'm back... ' It's been a minute, I know. I got caught up again in my own writing and just adjusting to having a second job and working so many more hours and life... But enough about me!

I really liked Josie's game of charades in the beginning. Not only because it's entertaining, but because it can be hard to describe exactly how you picture your characters moving! (I think that's half of why so many people- myself included- struggle with fight scenes.) I know when I write, I'm never quite sure the readers will picture what I'm picturing, but I think you got all her gestures across clearly.

The date scenes were fun. I enjoyed their early awkwardness just as much as Valerie finally loosening up to the idea and starting to enjoy herself.
"She wanted to see Goten smile and know that she was the cause of it." Somehow that one line was as beautiful as it was innocent. Like, it was such a simple desire, but that's the part of love stories that really get me, when I do connect with them- just wanting to make the person you're with happy, and have fun with things. Like, the perfect, fancy date night that Bulla set up for them really doesn't suit Goten and Val, so I loved that they made it their own thing. (And the scene with the candles and the flowers was just so much fun!) Not gonna lie; I was kind of expecting a stiffly awkward, semi-formal date that left them both uncomfortable for the next few days, not knowing how to act now around each other... But I couldn't have asked for anything better than what you actually gave us.

I stumbled across this a week ago, and fell completely in love with it, and have read every chapter so far. This is such an incredibly epic story, extremely well written, vividly detailed, and you've even managed to keep everyone in character flawlessly. I'm enamored with your OCs, and felt as though I was experiencing what they were; the fear, the uncertainty, the anger, the sadness. This was conveyed so eloquently through your storytelling, and I am on the edge of my seat waiting for more!

100 DAYS WOW! That is worth celebrating! This and my come back! And your come back! It is a very special day and I also have so many beautiful flashbacks to me from over a year ago, of me reading your story on my phone, tablet, laptop, sitting, lying, walking, standing... So much sentiments here!
I needed some time to flash on previous chapters to recall everything and where I stopped the last time and I just need to tell you that I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH! Even more now!
So excited to see what's next, bet there is going to be so much crazy adventures!
I always imagined that Josie and Trunks will sit in front of big ass windows, flying trough space, with beautiful views and Trunks will tell her all about the universe. I've got some vibe of it when he found her sleeping in cockpit. They are so cute!
And I mean... Future Trunks, well Josie, that was just ruthless! Poor Trunks. I wonder, is he finally comes to awareness of his feelings towards Josie? Because she's def not here yet... So oblivious my girl.
Happy that you gave us also some story from the Earth! Those 3 girls means trouble! I love this bond that Bra has with our girls now. She sure has some temper, hard to say if she's got it from her mommy or daddy - but definitely she's their daughter - I mean Trunks kind of lacks of it, he is so preservative. But they all share this one- they will not f*** around with those who will dare to hurt their loved ones!
And I promise you - My Love, when we finally get together - you know - when our time comes - I will also fight for you like a beast! Like a Ozaru!
You are the best and this story too and I love you and your talent. Stay safe! Stay inspired! Stay motivated! Stay faithfully loving me! And never stop creating XXXXX