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Okay now you have reached a critical point, do you continue the story in America. Or do you finish it here?

You must realize that it will be very hard to write an enjoyable story when you continue it in America. You'll need to introduce many COC, and the story will probably feel very OOC. That does not necessarily needs to mean that the story will suck, but it does makes it harder to read in my opinion. If you write an OOC story then the readers need to put more effort to read the story, and if you don't reward that extra effort, then they'll stay away.

Finishing it here will mean that you've written a very enjoyable story, and that'll be the end of it. It would be many of the good fanfics on this site, and one of the better beck fanfics.

The choice is yours of course. If you enjoy writting, then by all means continue.

Rutger50,

P.S. This was a fun chapter to read, thanks for writing it.

I have to say, this is one of the only BECK:MCS stories I will read. I absolutly love the character, the plot, and the way you transist it in a realistic manner. Beck is an anime about real life, it's a realisitc fiction. In my opinion, you're doing a great job making this story fit into the anime plot. Great job, keep up the good work!

Really liked the story.

Everybody is saying he is OOC but it's not weird acting differently than normally when you get frustrated, work really hard and meeting a girl.

Keep up the good work! :)

I had so much fun reading this, it's a very nice story. But I must say that this chapter was a bit short. Which is fine by me cause I should be studying for my physics exame, so I really don't have time to read a very long chapter. But still, a bit short. Otherwise it was all good.

This was beautiful, sweet and funny. But still it's not Taira (Sorry to say it.) Like I said before Taira is hard, if you're going to do a other beck fanfic I recommend a different character. (Chaiba perhaps? He isn't done much, and a very open person. But that's your choice).

I don't have much else to comment about.

The plot is entertaining, and though your writting style isn't exactely poetery, it's far from bad. You've got a good sense of structure (proven by the exellent end of this chapter), and succeed in making a very decent story.

I'll be cheered up when I recieve the e-mail for the next chapter. For I'm sure I'll enjoy it.

Still the critisizing note I stated earlier still stands. The Taira you write isn't Taira from Beck.

Wow now that is OOC. Really that isn't Taira, that's not even anyone in the entire Beck universe (with possible exception of Maho). I can understand that fanfics staring Taira are hard. For he is very an very introvert person. But still you could have tried to use his personality, instead of completly ignoring it. I'll read next chapter too, if I don't like it I won't review. Nobody likes getting bad reviews. (So I'm sorry for this one, but it's really what I think. And I think you might learn from it for a future fanfic.)

Not bad, but nothing too great either. Which is better then most fanfics envolving an OC.

This is cute. Glad to see someone else taking a stab at the BECK fandom.

~Reiki

I like this first chapter and your idea, pairing Taira with an oc thats his polar opposite. It should turn out well.