I like the interaction you have here.

It was fun to read.

Good job.

Very nice story, too bad it ended the way that it did with so many questions left un-resolved. Was there ever a sequal written for this peice explaining any of the things that had been touched upon during this situation between the two children?

That was a really great story, but that was a mean cliff hanger ending. Will they be saved? Will they die there? Can Asuka's injuries be fixed with the advanced medical technology that NERV has at it's finger tips. They could clone nerves and bones and such in order to fix Asuka's injuries.

What of Rei? Will she use her A.T. field to help them out? Will her faith in the commander be comfirmed or shattered against the hard floor? Will she ever have the chance to be true friends with Asuka, or will the lights go out on them forever...?

I must know! Did you ever plan to continue this, or are you going to leave us hanging like this forever? If you don't want to continue this, will you mind if I do? Please e-mail me with your wishes or at least a summary of what happens next... PLEASE!

This was and is a great idea for a story, and it was excellentaly written. There no mistakes that I could find in spelling or spacing. It was truely great! Keep up the great work! See ya! my e-mail is Please respond!

WHAT! Thats it no way!

Wow, a jem in the rough. I'd like to see a continuation of this storyline to see how the "new " friendship develops, and how does Shinji, Hikari and the others react to this! Plus of course how Asuka's paralysis is used within the Eva story, and their effects!

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It's a good story, I just wish it would be finished :T

He is writing another Fan Fiction at the moment but it is differn't to this. You can see him on the msg board at . He is a director there.

We need moe. This was vaguely cool. It would be truly odd if this turned out to be nothing more than a dream sequence.

aww...that's such a sweet scene about Asuka and Rei

but it would be nice if there was a sequel or something to follow it up too

(maybe pair rei up with kaoru, i sorta think they look good together)

That was short and sweet... somehow, I always thought that they could become friends, if not lovers, hehehe... good job though... is there a sequal by chance?

Spelling decent, grammar in need of work, overall construction average... Story good. Disturbing, especially for an admitted Asuka fan, but good. My main objection is that you don't really go deep enough into the consequences of Asuka's injuries, especially on a psychological level. Also, you do the Rei/Asuka relationship so quickly that they're basically both very OOC. That sort of thing should really be drawn out over time, with an event like this being the catalyst rather than the whole thing. Overall though, it's good enough as at least a story nucleus. I recommend it.

An excellent story with a well thought out plot. Rei and Asuka seemed to leek facts about themselves a little too quickly. There were quite q few punctuation problems, perhaps you need a pre-reader?

Man that was so heartwarming...not that way! Oh well maybe you should write a sequel about how everything happens afterwards? Oh well this is very nice! I could see you had put a lot of effort in this!

HI, this story somewhat needs a little more. Like what about a fight between Asuka and Rei over Shinji. and Have Rei win. I love Rei. Rei is my Goddess of Ice. _

Rei is forever _

on a more serious note. I think this story need some type of tru danger for the girls. Like the air is going out or have a million tons of water that will fall on them or a zombie comeing to eat their brians. Or something like that and Have Shinji rescue Rei, hold her tight in his arms and shoot Asuka in cold blood and have Rei and Shinji laughing all the way back to the surface _ just kidden. As long as Rei lives _ Rei is forever _