For ur fist tic it's really good.
I was reading this in class when the teacher came up from behind me and asked what I was reading, and I was near the smut part, and I just told them it was a blog someone wrote and they bought it. but when they kept on glancing at me during the whole entire period! EMBARISING! /

I t had a good start, but then it went all weird, shiro lost his accent for time, and ya made ichigo all lusty and demanding, those things degraded my thoughts towards it.

Lol, in the end Ichi's having mood swings :P.

Are you sure he was a virgin :P?

xD lol Shiro was cute asking about all those things. lol xD i totally lol-ed when he fell off the bed. xD and when he found his "popsicle." xD and Ichi being so mean~! lol it was cute and funny, a lil rushed i feel, but still good nonetheless.

It was ooc, but I liked it. Humorous but sexy at the same time :D

Lord have mercy lolol