interestin story... good job

Aw, soo cute! I kinda have a weakness for P/E (what *is* that, anyway) and I definitely like fics were Parker gets to do stuff instead of being rescued . . . so obviously this story is right up my alley! Good job, good characterizations, I only wish there was more of it coming!

HOT! Again, I love the snarky banter btw the two. Not mushy at all yet from Eliot's thoughts, we can see him slowly open up to Parker. Not much I can say except I bloody love this fic and I'm sad to see it end! Any chance of sequels?

oh lord this is a wonderful story, this one. please continue. i'll stay tuned!

“You know you guys are supposed to be married, right?” Hardison grouses in their ears. “And not like, fucked up married, like happy Sandra Bullock movie married. The self-loathing and hating each others guts doesn’t come till later.”

this line. oh, this line. i swear, hardison was speaking directly into my brain when i read this. quite amazing.

as was the rest of this piece. it put me in a far better mood (i swear, good stories are like prozac for me. i was on teh verge of punching my shit computer before this) and generally was fanfuckingtastic. i didn't want it to end. that is a direct hint, by the way. the story really shouldn't end here. it's jsut to glorious. everyone is represented perfectly, but in ways i would have never imagined - the way you write, i end up not being able to believe the characters ever DIDN'T act, or think, or do soemthing like this. it's so natural and at the same time so creative. and it just happens to be my two favorite characters of the show (although, i always seem to like alliot more when i can't see his greasy ass hair), acting how i wish they would.

so, all in all, write more. expand. you know you wanna. it's jsut to good to keep inside!

- pixie

ps: you can ignore the cheese, but it was that fucking great.

HAAHaa i hope they realize they like each other. good job keep it up

I'm loving this and its only the first chapter. I love that they are both very in character. I'm really looking forward to reading more. Update Soon.

I'm loving this story. The way you switch between banter and serious conversation and let us see Eliot's inner thoughts is amazing and really adds an extra level to an already amazing story. I'm definitely looking forward to chapter two.

Hehe. I loved when Parker was like, 'are you listing off your ex girlfriends?' and Eliot reaction. Priceless! Can't wait for the second half of this story, I'm hooked already.

Wow, I re-he-heally like this story so far! You write both of them very in-character, and I love the banter. This is like angel cake with little bits of maple candy inexplicably situated throghout, and that made much more sense in my head. The point is, awesome fluffiness and honestly interesting background info mixed in with the spicy parts! Definitely looking forward to the next part!

I love it! You did a great job with Eliot's internal thoughts. Love the plot, the flow, the characters' interactions.. Just about everything about the fic. It's cool that you didn't make the two of them too mushy and they even had the time to fight :) Will Parker ever reveal her real name? I can hardly wait for part 2.

Great story. I love the dialogue and Eliot's internal thoughts and observations. Everything felt very in-character. Will there be more?

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more please! )