the beggining is not my fav. closer to the end it seemes like the prologe of the original first chapter. could you just make chapter ten a happy one with roy and riza when he gets out of the hospital? well Its your fic, but i did not think there was anything wrong with your old fic. if you want to use your new writing style in the next chapers thats ok, the plot was good.

IM confused. I just started reading this about an hour ago. did i read the wrong chapters, i read them in order...:( let me know which chapteres are what cus i realy like the story so far.

ha ha I like that song too! Good job on this chapter!

oooooooooo its getting Intense. I like it. :)

SNL head bob (night at the roxbury)

reactions good. switching between actions in general is a bit short though.

I think this ones better than the last one, I love it though! Great re-write chapter!

I'll read. It's you fanfic, after all, do whatever you want )

That's good that you decided to ask this question - and the answer is: yes, at least, I will read it ;)

Don't worry, I have the same problem with one of my stories. Just can't force myself to sit and write the next chapter -_-'

Well DUH, of course I'd continue reading the story! It's a really good story, which is why I'm reading it in the first place ;)

Yes.

i would read it still :D

o0... Nice plot!

update soon

that was a good chapter...I bet its...havoc. or braida..oh i cant choose man haha

cant wait to find out :D

Nyah I want to know who it is ! Havoc ? When will the next chapter be up ?