That was nice! Also, the ESL issues weren't noticeable. Please write more G/E!

That was beautiful!

Bravo on your first LO:CI piece! You did great at capturing how these two have felt about each other as their partnership and personal relationship progressed.

Hey, you did far better than I could have at writing a story in German, so I wouldn't be too worried about the tiny errors or phrasing. Bobby is *hot* in ANY language! ;-) I thought it was a sweet and romantic story-kinda "sexy" without the sex actually being depicted.

...if you're going to write more (which I hope you do) I AM a registered CI Beta (hint) LOL :-)

I thought it was quite nice what you wrote and the secret marrige and baby on the way was a special supriese to me.

I just can't get use to the idea of them getting married and having a family but you kinda made it seem not as strange to me. I liked what you wrote and you should keep writing and finding other plots and stories to stick these great characters to.

PS Considering that english isn't your first languege you write very well.

great story, I really liked it! please keep on writing

Beautiful story. You did very well. I really loved this fiction. So I hope you will write another one or even other oneS.