No! No sex! It ruins everything.

I loved the fic up until that point. I will most definitely be treating the last bit as a punch-line...perhaps even as a metaphor. :P Really, though, it was a great fic.

I love how this was like, two different stories, but they blended together so well. Great job!

i love the punchline/ending! it totally works. they go through all the normalcy and weirdness of spending the night together with nothing hinky occurring, and the next day just happen to have sex in the elevator. it's poetic!

I love it! Great job! The last line made me smile!

I just stumbled across this. Loved it! I totally laughed at the end. Very good!

Bwhahaha! Well, the end may be a punchline, but what a fantastic one? Hee. All the rest was so beautiful, melancholy, and sweet...perfect Tiva. The image of them staring at each other as they brush their teeth was so perfect. Fabulous job! :)

loved it. :)

that was really wonderful! it was incredibly cute and sweet and i lived it!

Oh no, I totally see Tony and Ziva going down in the elevator (haha omg crudeness abounds!)! I really see each different event-well, their collective progression-moving the story to that last line, which I absolutely LOVED.

But I have to admit that I love the structure of your story more than I love the last line (it's really mostly the whole damn package of cherries on top of the biggest mound of my favorite ice cream). It's really clever of you as a writer to have two sequences of the same scenario parallel yet so different to each other. Both scenarios are very plausible; I can see Tony giving her a ride home on a good day, and Ziva being forced (by politeness or contriteness, hmm..) to give Tony a ride, and the subsequent events going through like clockwork (it really is amazing how you can use parallelism so well). I had leant towards the positive scenario originally, until I realized that their tension (sexually, emotionally, physically) is the best catalyst for the cusp of any story featuring those two characters. Because really, where's the fun of putting them together when they've done half the work for the author? Reading your story makes Tiva shippers remember how much they love seeing their favorite couple swathed in angst, because we know that in the end they're going to end up bedding themselves in that plush blanket made of typical romantic fluff. Well, in this case they have a quickie in the elevator, but that's definitely premise for romantic endeavors. Your characterization is well drawn out without any use of dialogue (it probably wouldn't have made the story as effective as it is without it) and I caught McGee, Abby, and Gibb's characters without even needing them to be fleshed out. That is skillz, my friend.

Fantastic job with this story! I was so pleased with how nicely written it is! Yay!

to be honest, i like your ending better than i like the normal, tiva get drunk and have sex, or whatever other extremely typical, unoriginal ending a lot of people write.

I love this! It's so good that you're allowed the OOC but hilarious last line ;)

Ahahahahaahaha I love that last line :) Great story!

sex in the elevator. Just a ordinary day in the life of TIva.