So sad but it is possible to happen at the same time, except for the GaryxMisty. It might be that I'm mentally blocking that shipping or there is no realistic click for the two but it doesn't work for me. Really sad fic, I'm going to read something happy now.

OMG AWW this is SO sad! :( Poor Ash! OMG SADNESS! Seriously, a dark cloud is just kinda lingering over me now. Well, good job anyway, LOL!

Your story was short. But heartbreaking. Keep up the good work!

the irony...

Pick a pairing and stick with it!

I'm glad that you allowed this story to see the light of day. I enjoyed reading it! What makes the story believable and real in my eyes is I see it as being plausible. Ash is always so focused on training his pokémon and pokémon in general that he rarely shows interest in anything else. It's a sad story, to be sure, that just as Ash begins to see there is more to life, his rash behavior (another character trait you successfully integrated) leads to all the pain that he caused others to come rushing back at him. I could feel his pain and sadness, and the the last five lines really hit hard and help to make this story a memorable one in my eyes.

I think you should give yourself a little credit. There is no harsher critic of one's work than oneself (not always true, but generally). Thanks for writing and posting this!

oh wow. That is just too sad. truthfully, I started tearing at the end.

How dare you think it was crap! That was wonderful!

This wasa cracking good read. I enjoy angst especially with a yoai twist...but i didn't like the ending...*Gary and Mistly together...shutters*

i especially like this part it made me giggle alittle bit

I am alone.

Even Pikachu—mentally—isn't with me. ( hehe)

good job

I don't know, since I feel like bitching/bashing Ash so, ..., "You deserved it!"

lol, okay, it was angst. Good to see Ash suffer. Of course he needs to, seeing as how he hurt Gary. Since I love Gary just soo much, I really didn't like him going to Misty, or any girl for that matter. HE HAS TO BE GAY!. um, Sorry for the out burst, but since 'm also an Egoshipping fan so that part is good.

Anyways, The story was quick paced and alright for a one-short.

WOW! This story is so sad.

:/ Poor Ash. I don't really know what else to say.

But I really liked it.

You shouldn't put yourself down. It wasn't crap :D

Anime-rocz-'nd-you-know it :]

This was good.