Perfect, the only problem, I can see is your naming Fleur as Fluer which is wrong you just need to edit this chapter for her name and it's perfect/

Your writing is great the only thing right now that is wrong is Alistor it's supposed to be Alastor Moody good work though keep it up

Keep writing this is amazing!

This is a wonderful story so far. I am looking forward to more. I find it rather sad that so few stories have anyone trying to find some way to help the Longbottom family I am glad to see that you are not following the trend. I really love that you have Snape being a good guy and showing him as a good teacher. Again I am looking forward to more of this wonderful story.

CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE!

great fic so far but the only thing i can find fault is that Narcissa Malfoy nee Black is Sirius' cousin not sister. Sirius only had a younger brother. While Narcissa, Bellatrix and Andromida were sisters. but like i said great fic otherwise. Can't wait for the next update

um Narcissa is actually Sirius' cousin. Narcissa's sisters are Andromeda and Bellatrix too. Sirius only had a brother which was Regulus.

Heya!, just wanted to let ya know you made a minor mistake in this chapter. The liquid luck potion is actually gold not silver. It's a very minor thing so don't worry about it.

Monica

Wow! I love this story! :) What happens after the new years party?

Brillaintly done. It is original and diffeent and is a very good ideas. Well done update soon.

Very detailed and creative story. Very well written and great at keeping the attention of the reader.

-Lvmj

Love the story, Hope you'll update ASAP!

Nice man with a captial nice

I love your story. Your ideas, while maybe not completely original, are diverse enough and unique enough to make for great reads. However, you either (a) need to consult the HP books, or (b) consult the HP Lexicon for spellings of Harry Potter related names (ie. Fleur, not Fluer, Cruciatus, Scrimgeour, Beauxbatons, etc, you get the idea). Work on getting those things spelled right, and I think you will see a lot more reviews. In case you would like the link to the HP Lexicon, which will have anything you could possibly want on it with regards to the HP verse, it is below. Because of this stupid system not permitting web site addresses, I am going to spell this one out.

http colon slash slash hp dash lexicon dot org

Keep up the good work on your stories.

wonderfully original. i look forward to your future updates. keep 'em coming.

Jone-Z