Honestly, I don’t want Bella and Edward to get together. I think they would be a terrible couple. Edward is too controlling and stuck in the past. Edward would try to control her whole life to keep her safe and stop her hunting and she would hate that because bunting is her life. Another thing is that I think the boys should let Bella drink because I’m sure they were both drinking at least at age 15 and I want her to be able to do drinking contests and stuff and drink people under the table. Back to Edward I hope he figures out that he has some sort of unhealthy obsession with Bella and leaves her alone and Bella figures out what he is and the boys and her go to threaten the Cullens. I don’t want Bella to have a love interest in this story I want her to become a little like dean once she’s old enough to have sex. Not sleep with everybody but at least know how to do it and have a high enough count of men she’s slept with you know what I mean, not a slut but not a prude, a healthy sex life. Anyway this is long enough, I hope you get back to writing and keep Bella and Eddie apart. Love this so far ; )

27. TRANSFORM!
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I really miss your story, it's a shame that you didn't keep posting.

Truly wonderful story! I got here to the end o what you've posted and wondered what happened that you hadn't been back to post the few remaining chapters. So, I went to your profile to see if there was anything there and found your other story that you'd updated in 2017 and peeked at the last chapter's AN (I'd have read the story but have no clue what Covenant is. At any rate, I'm so sorry to read about you losing your dad. I've lost both my parents now and know too well just how devastating a loss it is. I was also delighted to learn you'd gotten married and hope yours is a marriage to stand the test of time and fills your life with love and joy. I Hope one day you'll make it back to finish this. Best wishes!

Oh my gosh it’s been years since you last updated and I just wished you’ll start writing again, because it’s an amazing story. One that I just keep on coming back to. And I still hope that one day you’ll finish it.

Actually Edward is the third oldest. Jasper is actually older than him, being born in 1844, changed in 1863. Where as Edward was born in 1901, and changed in 1918.

I would have thought Bella’s middle name would have been Mary. Since in the books her middle name was Marie, and Mary was her mom.

Bella was kind of a bitch when talking to Sam in this chapter. I mean bringing up Jess was a bitch move. That was way, way out of line. I mean Jess has only been dead how long, a month at the most (guessing here, no idea what you timeline is, but phantom traveler takes place a month after Jess’s death). Sam was out of line when he brought up Mary, but I think what Bella said was way, way worse.

But to be fair she is a 17 year old teenage girl. So I guess she is acting her age, I think.

I have to be honest. I cracked up laughing when Sam told her to stop acting like a kid when she told him to stop treating her like one. I know that probably wasn’t your intent, but I still found it really funny. I mean, talk about acting like a teenager.

I also find it necessary to point at that she is 17. She IS a kid.

I do think Sam crossed a line bringing up Mary, but I think Bella crossed a line first bringing up Jessica. I mean she’s only be dead a month at the most (I’m just estimating here, I have no idea what your timeline is. But it can’t have been that long because Wendigo took place just a week after Jess died).

I also have to take Sam’s side in their arguement (funny little tidbit; my phone just autocorrected “arguement” to “argue me to,” hah).

Bella’s still in school, so obviously she can’t take all the hunts with Sam and Dean because she can’t miss that much school. Cause if you miss to many days the school will call the truancy department (part of social services that deals with attendance) and then social services gets involved which would be really bad for the Winchesters considering their situation.

The fact that their dad is awol. I’m pretty sure that John is still Bella’s legal guardian, although it’s possible that Dean is listed as well. I don’t think Sam would be, because he’s been at Stanford for the past two (or is it four?) years, and he was only 18 when he left. And I doubt they took the time to update that info.

Then we also have to take into account the fake ids, impersonating law enforcement, credit card scams, and overall history with the law. Not to mention the fact that there isn’t a stable home environment with how much they move around. And let’s not forget about the entire arsenal in the trunk (and I really doubt that they have permits for all of those guns).

Any caseworker worth a damn will take one look at that and put her in foster care. So if she wants to keep taking cases on at this rate, she’ll end up having to drop out to avoid getting on social services radar.

Although I really doubt that the Winchesters were able to stay off of social services radar, with how often John would leave for long stretches of time. I’m sure that a motel manager has to have called the cops at least once before, if not a few times. Maybe not if John just rents house for them if he’s gonna be gone for a while.

But I’m sure that the fact that there is no adult in the household has caught at least one teacher’s attention. Although I do have to admit that it’s possible that they wouldn’t have noticed if they only stay somewhere for a month at a time.

Wow. I really have overthought this, haven’t I?

Anyway, do what you want. After all, it’s called fiction for a reason, right. And who am I to tell you what to do with your story.

I would have loved to see Emmett and Jasper put the fear of god into Jessica and Lauren for spreading rumors about their little brother

It can’t just end there! He just told her that he loved her! You can’t abandon it now! He never even found out that she’s a hunter!

You swear, huh? The last time you updated was four and a half years ago.

Sounds like a new improved Mary Sue...

Welp.

Holy crow. Its been a while since I have found such a good story. I do hope you plan to continue even if a few years later.

Update pleasem