This was very sweet. I love Natsuki and Khi as a couple, even though I have no doubt that they do get together post-manga.

This is absolutely amazing! It's rare that I get such a good DearS story with good grammar and the ability to keep characters in perfect character! It's not only funny, but at times it sounds almost sad and you really feel for the characters! Keep up the good work!

Well here's to how far this story has gone and the hope that you can finish it up despite that horrible set back. I myself have trouble trusting internet storage, best to keep some stuff on discs and such.

On another note, as an idle thought I ponder just who could one day become Fina's master. Obviously he'd/she'd have to be someone quite special as he'd probably need Rubi's acceptance too. It is odd how the manga never addresses this issue given that as a DearS Fina should want a master as well, despite being a leader herself. One could certainly envy whoever it would be though as one can only imagine the things Rubi and Fina could do together in regards to appeasement... _

I am filled with remorse that this travesty has occurred and am so glad you have decided to post part one. I shall look forward to the posting of part two with great anticipation.

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yay loved it!

You should write another one!I loved it there my most favorite characters. I haven't watched all of the anime do they become bonded? One question... was it just me or did Khi's character change ever so slightly? like in chapter 4 or 5 on?

Sorry it's just I'm a writer to so I just noticed it but that is tied with 'Fidelity' in my most favorite fanfic's.

great chapter, love the supsense in the end there, - look forward to your update

wow... such a long chapter .
so cool though... she finally decides to go for what she wants...
and now khi's making his move as well?
but what's with the lubricant? OMG hahaha :D
update this soon, please i really enjoyed this chapter

brilliant set up for the next chapter
as far as cliffies go that wasn't that bad
though you should update soon that is the risk of using them
as ever i look forward to your next update

great job

hope you get chapter 5 up soon been loving this story

ooh! heat things up, yes please!

woot!

awesome! loved it!

i like :)

interesting guy, Rai. love the idea of him being able to experiment with his hair :)

although... nice distinction between 'Gift' and 'love' Khi definitely needed that

keep going, i'd love to see what happens