I loved this. I haven't really ever decided if I ship SoraKairi or RikuKairi, but I guess I just sort of subconsciously decided that I like SoraKairi better, maybe just because it's canon.

But this completely changed my mind. I like this one piece so much more than all the SoraKairi I've ever read.

Fantastic job!

*fav'd*

-Dominque

I've only recently become curious of RiKai. And after passing through a few alright fics, I find this. :3

I LOVE how it all flowed and the vivid imagery. It was so easy to imagine and see it all, from kids onward. Ahhh, I love it! I can't think of how else to describe it. Sorry -.- (and this doesn't have more reviews is beyond me...)

-le faye

Beautiful vocab and metaphors. Seriously, I suck at implementing metaphors, so I always appreciate someone who does a better job at it than me. And, the pairing is wonderful!

*chokes*

Oh man, that was so beautiful and well written!

I loved all of it, and my favourite line would have to be:

The rain hides so many things. Tears, fears, pain.

Me.

3 Really great job, your writing style is brilliant _

You should write poetry if you haven't already. Seriously, you have a way with words and creating beautiful images with them. Very good pacing.

Corrections/Feedback:

{But he is always reminded of how her footsteps splash into the puddles, slowly rising and falling like a new born baby bird beginning to fly and watch everything in slow motion, like the moment when someone is thrown off a cliff and the outstretched hand that nearly reaches you is missed by a fraction of a second and millimetres apart.} I believe there should be a comma after "a cliff."

{You wonder why you heart speeds up one two three.} "you heart" should be "your heart." Also, I think there should be a comma after "up" and between the numbers too.

{He smiles and it feels like dawn has come and made his skin grow alight in hues of red and orange and blue to match the colours of his eyes and the shape of his cheeks.} A comma after "smiles", and another after "and blue."

{You see his smile, dancing just on the tip of his lips, barely crooked but it’s still there and you’re closer than ever, fragile like the seashells you collect in that plastic green bucket, and oh, it’s wonderful-} A comma after "barely crooked."

{When you submerge, completely soaked with a smile on your face, your hand still is held in his.} I think the "is" in "is held" should be omitted.

{But it doesn’t stop him from looking up into the sky once more and she loves the way the moon and the flickering fire control the way he looks as if he is an ethereal creature made of moonshine and moondust, so fragile and delicate but still there beside her, unwashed by the rising tide that gently hums back and forth, swaying like the trees up above them.} A comma after "once more", and another after "he looks."

{A smile creeps up on his face and a mischievous glint sparkles in his eyes at he meets hers.} I think "at" should be "as."

{Scooting closer towards him, she hands him a raspberry marshmallow, just a shade lighter than her skin and if she gasps while his fingers brush against her skin she hopes he didn’t hear her.} A comma after "her skin."

{Rain has decorated a pattern of loss and sorrow on his face and it shows on the tip of his tongue.} I believe there should be a comma after "face."

{And he realizes that she’s so much closer than she’s supposed to be and if she gets any closer then gasp one two three it’ll be like that plummet in the sea where he wished that he’d never let go.} A comma after "to be", and another after "closer."

{Gasp choke breathe breathe- lips touch and it’s like trying out the combination of raspberry and vanilla marshmallows for the very first time.} Is the lack of comma in the first part ("Gasp choke breathe breathe") intentional? Just wondering.

Cool~!