I AM SUpEr In LOVe WiTh DiS One!

i love that story even if it 1 cahpter

3 Heartwarming. I love it.

I love the ending! Ahahahahaha.

It just gives a warm, happy feeling in my tummy you know!

Anyway, really awesome story!

Congrats on your win and please write more!:D

Lol one word.. amazing. :)

I was confused at first at the beginning cause I didn't know who POV is it. I like the ending :D And I love the title x) Good job.

Good luck for the contest.

-haruh

I loved this story. It's the best one I've read so far. It didn't seem rushed like some of the other stories. It was clear and straight to the point and left no room for confusion. I like the storyline too! The ending was pretty good. It doesn't giveaway too much and I hope that there will be a sequel! but of course, it's a one shot so no sequels..( well i really really enjoyed reading this fanfic!

I admit the story captured my attention and I read until the end wondering how the plot will develop. How Natsume moved around the setting feels comfortable with the narration and the pace. I like how you plugged in the required lines as stated in the account profile, it didn't seem forced. But - I also confess I got satiated in some parts because the details are on a surplus (too much). The story can follow the path to life without them. Mikan was very calm for someone who's not a nature person. At the middle, I began wondering where the plot is going, then before I could craft possibilities, NatsuMikan kissed. I was startled. They were in love? o.o Here's why the surplus became a big problem. The space used could have been used to develop their attraction. :) And Mikan left the farm, in love and broken-hearted I felt deprived of the development when that happened. There could have been more. The ending didn't sound cheesy at all. I'm glad Natsume found her.

*glitters in eyes* aw... that was so romantic brilliant!

that was so romantic!

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