| Reviews for Father's Rivalry |
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   Janey-Paininator chapter 4 . 4/11/2012 Will you be continuing this story? I hope so! |
| Tamaki.Lover chapter 4 . 12/25/2011 Pleaseeeeee update! Please! It's so good and cute:) |
| Tamaki.Lover chapter 3 . 12/25/2011 OMG! trouble is coming! Please continue;) |
| Tamaki.Lover chapter 2 . 12/25/2011 Please let her end up with Kyoya! I love your chapters continue! |
| Tamaki.Lover chapter 1 . 12/25/2011 Great first chapter can't wait to continue reading:) |
| BerryEbilBunny chapter 4 . 7/5/2011 Awh... I was hoping for more chapters! Please update! |
| RachelAnneGrey chapter 4 . 7/4/2011 i think i am really going to like this story so please update i was wondering when mori said maybe its costume made, did you mean custom made or am i totally off my rocker? anyway really good story! |
| romancelvr25 chapter 4 . 12/29/2010 i am really interested in this story! I want to know how it goes! Please please please update this story! I think its cute when Kyouya and Haruhi have those awkward moments! |
| katarina chapter 4 . 12/17/2010 please write more it was really good |
| Raven Nevermore Witch chapter 4 . 9/27/2010 Please update soon, I want to see what happens next. |
| love109 chapter 4 . 9/16/2010 update again soon plz :D |
| the dark euphie chapter 4 . 8/1/2010 very pretty dress, it does suit her. please update. these two competeing with eachother because of haruhi will be hilarious. |
| PureHearts chapter 4 . 4/24/2010 custom-made, mannequin, and a few other typos, but the story line is really good! I always wondered what happened after that conversation, so i really appreciate this story. |
| REAL-Ella-Martinez chapter 4 . 12/1/2009 UDATE SOON! |
| ExistentialistAtBest chapter 4 . 10/13/2009 Okay, I didn't actually read your story, I kind of skimmed through it. The reason I didn't actually read it was because I think that the format is terrible. I'm not saying that the story is terrible, because I haven't read it. But, the conversation parts are really confusing with the way you're typing them. Also, you're getting your past tense, present tense, and future tense mixed up. For example, one of the sentences was "Honey said as he runs over to Haruhi". And, I'd also have to say that Kyouya and Haruhi are pretty out of character. I personally don't think that Kyouya would blush 'up' at Haruhi. First of all, that's not like him. Second of all, Haruhi is shorter than him. So, it would be "Kyouya blushed down at Haruhi." But, that was just bothering me. You also have a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes. I know that this is a long list, but you did say that you were open to suggestions. First fanfictions are the hardest. I know. Sorry for the long review, ~Chris |
