Interesting...

Hmm...that was...weird.

Though I had really like to see, how Charlie realizes what he really wants to do to Allen. Though maybe that never happens...*sigh*

Are you gonna write another one-shot? Or better a multi-chaptered story featuring Charlie/Allen?

Heh heh, FAIL.

Please update another chapter with more watersports. Thanks. :)

I love this! I love this show and I love piss, ao this ia great. Although it probably says somehting about my mental stte that the first fic I read for this fandom is of the slash/incestuous/watersports variety...Oh well, thats what I like.

Never thought I'd actually find this kind of thing hot ... Incest and pissing? But hell, I enjoyed it.

He didn't put up much of a fight... either times Charlie did it to him... perhaps those two share something, interests-wise... ;P

This is one of my favorite shows.

And one of my favorite kinks.

My hat goes off to you for this well written masterpiece. My only regret is that I can only favorite it once. It's mostly in character and I see it happening in my head, which is not something I am usually able to do with fanfics for live action categories. You're 12 kind of awsome.

To my fellow reviewers,I'll be using my account to post stories for the people who don't have the courage to do it themselves. If you have a scat or W/S or even beastiality story and can't bring yourself to post it, email or Pm it to me and I'll do it for you. You can specify whether or not you want to be credited, who you want to be credited as, or whatever. I'll be happy to help.

Someone help me spread the word?

Oh man. I LOVED THIS XD I like crazy kinks like this, and Alan and Charlie are my OTP, so... yeah :) Nice!

I'm waiting for the other nights ;)

lol how strangely in and out of character at the same time. congrats you made me feel like a huge perv for loving this story. :)

This story was great! You really captured the characters. I have, regrettably so, a watersports fetish so that was awesome. But even if the story hadn't contained pee, I would have loved it. The way you had the characters act and what you had them say was so spot on. I laughed so hard when you said this: "What the hell," He muttered as he opened the door. He wasn't known for his impulse control." I can totally see Charlie saying that and then just going for it. His excuse was also so Charlie like. "Alan said evenly, the tremor at the end barely noticeable." - This line was amazing. I totally see Alan doing this. He does it every time something uncomfortable happens. I'm so happy you paid attention to the details like that. Okay, so this may be really wrong but I totally see this as a series of one shots. I can totally see Charlie doing the same thing to Jake one night only to find out that Jake really likes it. Then the two of them do it to Alan again- together. Ugh. Please write that. Anyway, thanks for writing. Hope you come out with another story soon.

-Laura

Wow! Your grammer is awesome. I know thats what you grilled me for, but it's only fair i share tips: more dialouge please. and I cannot for the life of me see Charlie doing that. urine kink nice.

Sorry for saying my story was first slash and I'm glad to see we are both stumpped. Why didn't you go to A writting forum or circle? Hope u finish this.

you really need to make more. It won't hurt you. You should make a sequel, or another chapter, or both. There aren't enough fanfics for this fetish, and you wrote this so well.