Can I just say...YES!

This is amazing!

bkuewgbzibtehfikgrwfvche...omg that was amazing!

Cute, I loved it.

Odd...Very characteristic of Dean. Awkwardly realistic.

So much emotion in such a short story, I enjoyed, even though it made me sad! Well done!

Very clever. The outlining of Seamus's faults and personality traits was excellent. I always thought there wasn't enough written about both Seamus and Dean.

This is very, very good.

oh my god... what the fuck, hey I am so mad at seamus right now! You did this to me!

i LOVE this. i love the fragmentation; i love the way you've drawn seamus here... he doesn't realize how transparent he is, maybe doesn't even realize that he's trying to hide... it's just perfect. and i love his disheveled, frenetic charm.

it all rings very true to me. lovely.

I really, really liked this. However, you have quite a few sentence fragments.

I especially have issues with this part:

And then the way that he can’t help but give Dean a rough, cold shouldered shove backwards when he finally decides he’s had his fill and let’s him go. Says nothing and staggers clumsily away to bed.

1. The word "and" should not begin a sentence. Starting it with "then the way..." would work just as well.

2. For the second sentence (which is really a fragment), just use the word 'He', which should still give it the type of choppy flow you were aiming for.

I do like the pace that this fic has and I am not in any way trying to get you to change that, but the grammar nazi in me won't let you make this mistake.

~Trii

im a little confused about that last paragraph; it seems a little... dubcon to me...