.. nice story .. I really love ueki and mori a lot... hehhe .. English is my second language too .. so like you,I really had a hard time using it hahaha

some words are misplaced but its alright ..just try.. anyway there is always room for improvements..

reading novels, books and stories in English helps a lot .. so if you have time, try it )

Keep writing in English ...

Hi, Ki.

It's a nice try, that you wrote it in English and I really appreciate it. There were some slight grammatical mistakes but that's fine.

Try to re-read your fic another time, so, you'll get a better chance to control the grammar.

You should improve your 'passive voice' comprehension, the use of articles, and the use of 'to be'.

Some of the mistakes in this fic were about these subjects.

And as Noiha has said before in his review, I wanna say too, that my grammar isn't 're just about the same, eager to learn and try. So I really support you.

As always, I like the ideas of your fics. I think you're quite a writer. )

I'm eager to read more of your fics. Liked your writing.

it was nice.. :)



xD liked it.

i love the small talk! :]

I really loved it, It talks about how Earth should be treated. I love it love it love it! Pwease write more! I want to hear more about this :D

From begining i already guess you are indonesian. Your grammar is so indonesian, well not that's a bad thing, really.

I think this is good and nice.

And save.

Plotless, if i may say, but quite neat. :)

I cant comment much on the story coz as i said it is save. No conflict and no climax. Well but quite refreshing.

I like how you keep them in character. That is the best thing of PWP story, you dont have to be afraid they'll be too OOC. But still, your characterization is good.

:) i give u

8/10

Try again ok?

I'll read again.

Recchinon

this fic is fluffy as it can be...

that's why I really love it even from the first time I read the Indonesian version... :)

well, slight grammar mistakes, it must be hard to read fics with your second language...

and don't expect me to be good! my English is worse than yours! I admit it! XO

haha, keep writting~

Wow. That's...cool X3