Oohoo! Poor ash, I think valencia kicking him in the head was a tad far. And maybe do another one-shot of his "plans" for later in kinky details

This was a pretty good story. I like your two OCs, and how they interact with the other characters. Especially Jake. The fact that it's a DragonFable fic makes it all the better! Very nice job, I enjoyed reading this.

Yep. That was good. the pun on opposites attract was good, the self-insert without too much self-insert- that was good too. your style is funny... what else can i say? there's nothing i can really correct you on.

This was a pretty good story. I like your two OCs, and how they interact with the other characters. Especially Jake. The fact that it's a DragonFable fic makes it all the better! Very nice job, I enjoyed reading this.