Kinda disappointed that MetaKnight wasn’t the final winner as in the game he “canonically” beat Galactica fair and square from the first time. Oh well...

how does he appear in other games if he is dead?

I crying my eyes out so much that I ruined my homework and have to do it again.
I loved it so much.

Amazing...I wish I knew how to write battles like this.

I can't wait to read the rest of the story

Seriously, this is just so... so... asdfghjkl
I mean, I could cope with it in the beginning, but then my feels just kinda expldoed and I hope you are aware how wonderful-yet-heart-breaking your work is.
*goes to sob in a corner now*

PURE EPICNESS

ITS AWESOME

WANT MORE

NOW

PLEASE

Does gray eyes mean he's sad? anyways, VERY nice story. it made my day.

It shames me that I have not yet reviewed what I believe to be is one of the best Kirby fanfics written on this site.

Before I get into the heart of the review, I want to mention that I have sort of an emotional attachment to this story. The first time I read it was during the summer of 2011, and at that time, you hadn't finished writing it yet.

By the first flashback, I was already filled with excitement. Not wanting to stop, it was already late at night but I kept on reading until 3 AM the following morning. I even pulled off all-nighters. Just to finish this story. There were the segments with Nonsurat being so deliciously brutal that I had to keep on reading and rereading until morning just because they had struck that much of a chord with me.

Few people see the poignant story that awaits within the backstory of the GSA-and you're one of the few that see it and bring it to life. At the point when I first read it, this was the closest I could get to my dream of reading a full, canonical account of the war with Nightmare.

In essence, what makes me enjoy this story so much is the amount of characterization involved. The soldiers of the GSA are like blank slates-except for a bare-boned characterization given in canon, everything's up to interpretation. You have the best characterization for Sir Arthur and Sir Nonsurat that I've ever seen, although that's an easy call since this is, again, among the only fics that ever attempt to give them a personality.

Heck, I could say that about every character you've fleshed out within this story-even Meta Knight, who usually doesn't get that kind of treatment. I love it when authors aren't afraid to make him suffer in the ways most soldiers are supposed to suffer during a war, and having him crash in the desert and slowly dehydrate and starve shows that he has his weak and 'human' side as well.

Rare to ever see this in a fic (let alone a Kirby one, at that), but the description of Shiver Star given in chapter 11 seems scientifically sound. I'm no science major, but the mention of air quality and hydrogen really wows me, and it makes me think that more thoughts than just character development were poured into this fic.

Speaking of Shiver Star, your description of it seems to be of planet similar to Neptune. This is the first time I've seen it described in detail through a story, but most people seem to be in agreement that Shiver Star is a post-apocalyptic Earth after nuclear winter. Your description of it works, too.

This fic has inspired me in ways that nothing ever has before. Maybe it's the subject material, since I have a bias on just about anything that has to do with Star Warriors or the Galaxy Soldier Army. The character and plot development was my example for what war was like for the GSA. Hell yes, /this/ is how it's run! The infighting, corruption, organization of rank and the strategy of securing natural resources were all exactly how I'd imagine it to be in canon.

I salute you for this; a lot of theories of mine were confirmed by your story, and a few of your interpretations (namely the organization of the GSA and Nonsurat's brutal personality) have influenced my own work as well. But I don't downright plagarize, mind you.

Now, for the only thing I have to say in criticism: it was hard to tell when the flashbacks started and ended, which is strange, because from what I remember of it in my first word-for-word read through, the flashbacks were all so clear-cut. However, this time around when I was reading a little faster, I noticed that a line-break would help the visual organization of each chapter.

Also, especially in the scenes where Meta Knight is thinking by himself, it'd be great to have his thoughts italicized instead of put in quotations. Even though all the text is black and your writing style/descriptions are colorful enough, that extra formatting helps to add texture and dynamics to the readers.

I know that this is a quasi-crossover with Super Star Ultra, but the usage of the helpers as species irked me. I can understand Plasma Wisps and Chillys being a species, but I've always seen Sword/Blade Knight as the name of an individual, not a race. Maybe that's because I'm too used to seeing him written as the individual seen in the anime, and it confused me because said individual appears in this fic as well.

A few minor mistakes: In the first or second chapter there's an uncapitalized 'she' at the beginning of a sentence.

In chapter 11, you call the GSA the 'Galaxy Star Army', and I assume you meant 'Galaxy /Soldier/ Army' instead.

I have always been meaning to review this story, to drop a word of thanks or two to the story that inspired me the most. And I am so, so glad I did.

Huh.

I would like to tell you that I enjoed reading your story a lot, but...that's not true.

[This is NOT a rant. Please consider it as what i is meant to be: intial feedback regardning things I noticed.]

So many times I had to shake my head, complaining about something not beeing right. It starts right away with the characters placed in the describtion. Meta Knight I get. But Fumu? What? Galacta Knight would have made more sense, seeing as this is his story. Fumu almost has no role in this.

Second, there are way to many moments with questionable logic in this. That can range from the way the characters act (or their lack of it) over genereall scenario information up to knowledge and time. Also, the majority of this story is told in flashback (sometimes even a flashback in a flashback). Okay, that's fine but there is one problem: Meta Knight is supposed to tell this more or less, right? Even if we go with the idea that we see his flashbacks while he tells the short version to everyone, just how can there be parts told that he did not witness? How does that make sense?

Also, back to the time issue and Meta Knight telling the story: even if he's talking more then usually here, it would not take as much time as you made it appere here. And ceveral things would not be told when you explain past events to others.

As for questions in logic, there were to many for me to remember all. One of the biggest probably was the first fight between Meta Knight and Galactic Knight in the tent of the former. You expect me to belive that no one of the other soldiers noticed that fight? That Meta Knight would not give a call? (Or only AFTER the enemy has allready fled) That it would take minutes for someone to reach his tent then and causual conversation before the chase? Ignoring the fact that Galacta Knight was able to sneek past the guards in that station (I'll give him that. It is hard but not impossible) where where they during the fight? And just WHY was Galacta Knight even there? To get his revenge on Meta Knight was the reason we where told I belive. Revenge for WHAT? Meta Knight hadn't done anything to him before, he even followed his plan even tough he thought it to be fatal. He said nothing to his comorades, he did call his supperior on this...so I ask again: what was the reason?

The story also lacks some clarification on on who is 'just' a member ot the Galaxi Solier Army an who is a Star Warrior. And since you included Meta Knights Game ability of hime turning his cape into wings, why was there no reaction from the Characters? Since he does not do this in the Anime, you should have either let them show surprise about this or indicated that they are all well aware of these abilitys.

Also, you call Kirby in on the LAST chapter and have him save the day without much of a problem. That's just not logical. Would it have been clear that Galacta Knight is also exhausted from the battle with Meta Knight, fine. I would still question why you included Kirby only just at the end insead of right away, but it would have made much more sense at least.

By the way, what happened to Sir Kibble? It was mentioned that he was transfered to Shiva Star as well if I'm not completely missguided here, but he was not mentioned after that.

All in all, I feel let down by this story.

It was not horrible, don't get me wrong. I have seen far worse. The writing style itself was actually quite interesting and good. What this lacks is a propper readthrough to correct all it's flaws and give it a better shape. Or simply said, a better way of the story beeing told.

Points for trying and at least succeding in telling a complete story with a plot diffrent from your 0815 Kirby of Meta Knight-Past story.

Wow, this plot is surprisingly well developed for a fanfiction! These few chapters's haven't ceased to amaze me...

Wow, I wasn't expecting much from this, but it honestly was... fantastic.

Kibble has A.D.H.D.

One of my faverite fanfics.

I'm guessing this is finushed now, so what did it mean by Meta Knight's eyes were grey?

So how is Nova?