This is a wonderful fic!

It seems like every time the boys get into a game someone else is out to kill them if they win. The citizens of this planet arent too bright if you never allow outsiders to win, why would anyone ever want to play with them, it would be a stagnant situation. Anyways it was a good story.

Ronon looked around the room, scowling. His fingers twitched over his blaster. "Are any people from your groups here on Atlantis?" he growled.

"None, thankfully."

Ronon's arm moved slowly back to the table. "If we ever go to Earth together, point them out to me."

Great lines ;). That was excellent, and it really should've happened on the show (boy, I say that a lot, don't I?), thank you!

Good story!

Great story!

Great Rodney story! I love the vulnerability you gave him! He really is a sweetheart. The gaming bar was a great idea it was so much fun, which we needed after all that angst! All in all a thoroughly enjoyable read.

Melissa

Awesome! I love it! The ending was awesome!

“Okay, what am I thinking now?” Rodney challenged.

“Don’t need to even see your face to know that. You’re thinking you could play better by yourself. But you’re wrong. We’re better as a team.”

I totally love those lines! Very funny!

Excellent story!

Loved the misery and dark-ish style.. and, of course, the friendship. Fun ending! :D

Congrats!

Read ch 1 & 2, was very good. Felt so sorry for Rodney in Ch 1, liked the team building thing.

Wow this was really amazing. Your explination of how rodney felt when he was hypo glycemic (sp?) and exauhsted (sp?) was very effective - and I love the freindship between Ronon and Rodney. Very well written.

Thanx for posting this

Kai x

Lovely

Aww. You had me with Rodney and worried about him every step of the way, and I found his 'solution' to losing Sheppard's trust very in-character. And I adore how it ends - how Sheppard gives him an equation to help him fly in a straight line. That's brilliant, and in two sentences says so much about their relationship. What a perfect story!

Really good story, loved poor Rodney's interaction with Ronon especially.

Great second part, too! I really loved the bits with Sheppard desperately trying to help Rodney piolet the Jumper safely to the ground, especially knowing what was coming from the teaser at the start, that was tense! And exactly like Sheppard, too, to put the anger he had at Rodney to one side the moment he was in danger.

Loved the piceces with just Rodney's impressions of the surroundings, great technique. And I really liked how you showed everyone on the team being there, watching over them, even without overt description or naming of them.

The whole bit with Ronon's test of trust was great, too! I was grinning when Rodney realised he'd passed, and when Ronon wanted to beat up the people who let him fall, too! And on that note, the trip to the 'casino' was excellent, very funny with the way that they cleaned it out, and of course great teamwork and team interraction!

And the ending, with the equation - really really lovely. I nearly teared up then, it was so sweet!

Please, please write more Rodney whumping stories, this one was fantastic!

Amazing story! I loved how you wrote Rodney, trying so desperately hard to make up for his mistakes, without letting Sheppard know what he was doing.

That scene with Lorne made me laugh out loud - so funny! I could really see the awkwardness of the 'private moment'. Did have to laugh again at the increasing failure of the flying lessons, too ;)

And I really liked that it's a Rodney/Ronon friendship story - I can't recall having read another one of those. Again, all the character voices were spot on, and I especially liked that Ronon was also trying to make up for his own mistake, too.

And what can I say about the whump? I loved it! Run-down Rodney in this way has always been my very favourite kind, and you wrote it so well! Loved how everything got steadily worse and worse for him as his contition deteriorated, poor Rodney!