Well this was nice:-)

Wow go rock go...but be careful ...the story is going awesome

why'd you stop it was getting good

good stuff

"How about here lies a stupid Italian?" Oh JM, you are a brilliant man XD. Very well written, I'm about to read the story this is a prologue to. 5/5 on writing skills, plot development, and keeping the characters in their personalities. With these characters, it's quite easy to mess up their personalities due to how different, extensive, crazy, and awesome they are, and since there are so many...you get my drift. But seriously, very well done as always.

-Soul.

Enjoying this story very much :) You sure have nailed Revy's character...I can really picture her saying your stuff! Great Job!

damn

Wait, that's the last chapter? Oh, I wanted more.

sweet, I'm glad you decided to add a little something extra to my fav black lagoon series.

it's nice, not all chapters end short, thanks for the credits :D sure didnt expect that one, youre very much welcome for the read through, you did a nice job, dont sweat it.

I can handle prequels, and this one does drop the reader at the exact moment of Rock's Big Snap at the beginning of the next story. Yay for background.

I liked the characterization of Watsup and Dutch. I love Dutch, although I see him as a more "not my problem" kind of guy and I can't imagine any sane person wanting to insert him/herself in the middle of the brewing romance between Rock and Revy.

Speaking of Dutch, I'm not crazy about Rock just up and confiding in Dutch about his feelings. Rock is unfailingly polite (wouldn't bring it up in the first place to avoid burdening others with his issues), and Dutch notoriously stand-offish (would walk away if confronted with anything touchy-feely). HOWEVER I would buy Rock taking Dutch into his confidence as a courtsey. Dutch is their employer, so Rock might want to give his boss a heads up about the shifting relationship between him and Revy. Or I could see Dutch calling Rock to the line and hanging him with responsibility to keep Revy undistracted ("If you want to do this, go ahead, but I need that girl in working order. A gunsligner with too much on her mind is bad for business and bad news for any plans to stay on this side of the living.")

Of course, this is a matter of my take on the charcters vs. yours. I tend to see all of the characters of Black Lagoon as emotionaly constipated, whereas you seem to see them as fully capable of understanding and expressing their complex feelings. As writers, we are entitled to our own takes on the characters. You can do whatever you like, and clearly some people like it. I can't point out anything wrong with your writing; it just feels too divorced from the source material for me to enjoy it completely. Sorry.

Another good job. Yet again you have hit the nail on the in regards to characterisation. The plot was a little light, but taken completely as a companion piece to RfRfR it works well, and really ties the end of the show into your series well.

My only problem with it was the self-deprecating comments at the end. It's good work, so don't drag yourself down.