Honestly Your grammer isn't that bad. However sometimes authors have the worse grammer and spelling ever.

“I want to keep Snape a Goldfish”. Susan said Koi-ly.

The rest of the chapter went well. I’m sure things are coming to a head.

TGM

Question how did wormtail escape just wondering cause last I knew you had him arrested

Per you note prior to the chapter. These critics who denounce every misplaced comma or minor spelling error burn me. First off, this is fanfic, which means amateur writing. I'm an English nitpicker, and mostly what I've spotted in your stories are dropped words. If one wants to read fanfic, which has some amazingly good stories, do not expect perfection. The authors are trying their best. Enjoy it, and if you must criticize do it in a helpful manner. Otherwise, do the rest of us a favor and hit the off button. Thanks for indulging my rant.

Love it. Great story. Hermione’s revenge was excellent! Thank you!

Well that was an interesting ride; full of twists and turns and at least one nice gambit pileup. (and I do so love a well done gambit pileup!) Here we are at the end, after much struggle to reach it I hear, and eight years past that.

I find the concerns about Harry's son prophetic, in a sadly ironic manner, I must say.

This isn't the best story I've read on FFN, or the best for this fandom. But this is 60k words worth reading, which is about the highest complement I feel exists. It's something to aspire to for any writer and you've met that here. Well done potter8668, to you and your editing helper(s).

Not gonna lie, I love Voldemort's reaction to the Black bequest for Bellatrix. Had to comment now, proper review when I'm done.

WTF did I just read? I understand that in a fan fiction anything is possible but dude...a girl sneaking into a boy's dorm to give him a rape hand job and even a baby when he's just a kid himself, that's quite some level of fucked up.

Its a shame Harry never fought his way out from the kidnapping, I've read other fics where Dumbledore and his Order of Cultists kidnapped Harry via portkey for his own safety even thou they had no right or legal means to do so but have yet to read one where Harry fights his way to freedom maiming and/or killing his way thru them.

This is a reread - dang, you still made me tear up!

Umm... Harry hasn't had Occlumency lessons yet. This is the summer BEFORE 5th year.

BTW if Sirius knows his time is limited, one would think he would set up & do a wizarding portrait to leave behind for Harry & Remus.

What an exciting read ! Thanks :)

With Harry confirmed as descendant of both Gryffindor and Ravenclaw, and Amelia and Susan the last two of the Hufflepuff line, can't the three of them take charge of Hogwarts and give Dumbo the boot? If Harry were to claim Slytherin by right of conquest, that would cover all four Founders, right?

Would Hogwarts respond to Harry and the Boneses as Founders' heirs and owners?

Loved your story. Toward the end seemed a little rushed. Even so definitely a reread. Thanks for sharing.

Wasn't Wormtail captured by Harry shortly at the Granger's funerals? When & how did he get free? Interesting tale.