Wonderful!

this is actually the worst thing i've ever read

Love this story

Love this story

I too love this show but one thing is certain. the characters need more depth more Holly/ Vince persona they need more description. the proposal was nice a little sudden but nice slow things down a bit and add more description and depth and you should be fine the story is still good.

-Damon Heart -

I like it please update super soon? :)

Um...wow. Yeah this story sucks..if you really want to create good stories I would recommend creating more of a scene. You should use imagery. Right, now I can't picture what's going on. Also, don't put it like Holly: Hey Gare! Guess what? You should write it like, "Hey Gare! Guess what!" Holly shrieked. It's how real writers write their stories and it would make yours so much better.

AWESOME STORY! Update soon!

GOOD STORY. i just have one thing to point out. When you said they were licking iceing off eachother's lips, it kinda grossed me out, but thats love! Godd job, you should really continue and write more fan-fics.