I like how in this fic sasuke and naruto are friends

small note zabuza's sword is called kubikiribocho and is one word not kubikiri houcho

this got dumb fast. Not that there weren't major issues earlier. Like how Konohamaru can even exist since, according to you, only 4 sarutobi's were alive after the 3rd war and Kyuubi attack (hiruzen, his wife, asuma, and kono) but kono is a few YEARS younger than Naruto. Therefore, Kono was born years after the Kyuubi attack. So he's either adopted, Asuma's secret son, or you fucked up on your living sarutobi's post-kyuubi attack.

But what seriously bugs the fuck outta me about your Naruto, is that you consistently tell us how much chakra he has, KAGE level reserves, backed up by Kyuubi's power, and allegedly very good, jonin level control, and extreme stamina. And yet, EVERY fucking TIME he gets into something serious, he's passing out, panting, exhausted.

Hell, why did he even need to flood the whole fucking ROOM with healing chakra? He needed to flood one small area, Kushina's BODY, she's not the size of a room! He's not trying to heal fucking Gamabunta! He's trying to heal a female human of normal size!

I knew the fic was unfinished, but still annoyed I wasted so much time now reading this far just so you can pull some silly ass bullshit to set Naruto back to Wave-arc level of Jutsu usage for shit that doesn't fucking exist in Naruto-verse. Human bodies in Naruto NEVER produce the physical and spiritual energy seperately.

Closest you get is the yin and yang natured chakra, but even then its still CHAKRA.

I really hope you continue this fic

After recognizing the likely hood that you are still active, I must ask if you are going to continue this story. It is quite good

It’s such a shame that this story is dead what is here is very enjoyable

I know you’ll probably never update it but I wish it would be updated because I love this fanfic so much

Were the two Itachi and kisame

My one thing I don’t like is that you said madara was the founder of the Uchiha clan but Indra was the founder

Hey what’s up I’m gunwolf or if you want to hdn for codename. Contact me at and I’ll try to help with the lemon scenes if you need it I’m still a beginner as well but I’ve gotten some positive criticism on my other account so if you need help you need but contact me

When’s the next chapter?

Just got finished catching up on this story. I hope that there will be more for it in the future. Keep up the good work and looking forward to checking out the rest of your stories.

I am ordering you to write more. You have such a talent

This story is absolutely amazing i love characters that i absolutely hated in the show and i dont know how to feel about that but you are talented

The constant rain makes me think Pein is nearby. But if that were the case someone would have figured it out. Jiraiya could tell the rain was a sensory genjutsu from the moment he was hit by it. I'm wondering when Kushina is going to pop up and why she hasn't been around. I just hope it's not another "she was told he was dead so she never came back" schtick.