it quite interesting please continue!

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE THIS! PLZZ WITH A COOKIE ON TOP (i'm a very un-cliche person

OOHOHO! now ur an inspiration! ren is so pissed!

this is an assome story! it needs some work. if you publish this book in America, you should put a glossary of some none American words in the front so people do not have to look up alot of should tell the age of the people in your story. you should explain the custom like why is her nose touching the and why did her friend 25 you mixed up the genders it should be him not her.

hm, too bad for ren! heheh, cant wait till the next chapter! nice fic so far!

iteresting chapter! i love it!

I really like your story so far. Please update soon! -LAG;p

OH* OH* OH* I CANT WAIT THIS IS GOING TO BE AN *EXCELLENT* STORY KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK AND CONTINUE TO WRITE THIS STORY IS GOING IN THE THE *RIGHT DIRECTION* WHOHO *RIVALRY* HAHA

so since kyoko is wearing light make-up, i am assuming none of guys are since you never described. you really don't know anything about how a movie is made do you? every single actor will be walking about with a cakeload of make-up so they don't come out pasty or odd-colored or even oily in the film. a little omission of the fact if you found it icky could have gone a long way. but since you mentioned it, it became distracting.

to be honest, i am actually starting to believe what i wrote the first time. the movie is only a mere plot device to force out a romance between kyoko and ren. i don't see any kind of uniqueness or a sense of commitment to your background (the movie). i think the only thing you're interested in is hurrying along the romance. you could have easily done that without the movie backdrop.

i love it and cant wait 2 hear more! :)

hey! D well, it's a good story so far... ;) I found it interesting how you were using flowers as chapter titles... )

Oh yes... no school on monday! woohoo! go SONA! D I shall give you a hug... *hugs* Okay, by now you might know who I am... xDD If you don't then my profile is a giveaway already... ))

See ya on Tuesday... D

Interesting. Can't wait to see where you will take this.

Oh my god. XD The description of the blond boy reminds me of Sho. . .O;. I see what you did there :P PLEASE CONTINUE :D Love it so far :D

i don't think you have any spelling mistakes:D The details for her new role sounds suspiciously like deja vu. Like her, Sho and Ren(: haha. Interesting plot line, would love to read more. I'll be waiting:D

~i get the job and script today - we don't have a script reading, i meet my co-stars today, we shoot tomorrow - not even giving us time to learn the script and not telling us the schedule of which scenes will be shot, do your own costume and make-up?~ how you set the timeline is too abrupt. if a movie's like this, the farthest it can go will be a family room's TV or a film class' projector.

how the movie will be shot seems so haphazard. makes me feel that instead of a movie with a budget, it looks more like a low-budget movie shot with a camcorder by a sixth grader. film students have more organization than that.

i hope you can reconsider your timeline more to make it a little more... feasible. i know it's fan fiction... but if it's out of touch with reality, it becomes a little too forced to bring out a romance.

also, you already commented on your A/N how annoying your OC is when you haven't written anything about him other than his appearance. you are already leading your readers that he is someone who is not supposed to be liked and already says that he's going to be written out as a jerk, which actually loses the impact it will have to us readers.

anyway, good luck with your fanfic.