"It was then that he knew the torment of being unable to touch the beauty that had made him, the glory that he had belonged to, the wonder that he had betrayed."

Honey, I don't remember reading these parts...are they new? They are utterly fantastic. I love LOVE how you are blending your worlds together in this way. The italicized parts are gut-wrenching, and you're reaching a level of base emotion that most writers can't even touch. This so far is the best part of the series.

Once again, I beg you to continue it!

SEE now there is a layer of something deeper in this one, and the peek of a backstory is killing me. Although, this may be the closest to a multi-parter that you've come to, am I right?

Regardless: love the fact that Nephrite forgets that he doesn't have to clean the apple, and I like the characterization that he uses physicality to overcome obstacles, but is not a match for Helios. It must be frustrating to have to sit back and do nothing.

I would love to see more of this because when they realize what has been going on, it's going to be a sledgehammer to the groin. Write it! Write more! Just write everything ;)

ARGH SO CLOSE! AND SUCH BEAUTIFUL IMAGERY!

This is the first fic where I actually WANT Kunzite to die, so that he can join the rest of them in Elysian. And heck, knock off Endymion too. There are naked maenads and delightful gluten-free vegan food in Elysian!

Oh how I wish you would write a fic where the prompt is "delightful gluten-free vegan Elysian"!

How tragic that he can almost remember, but it's just beyond his reach. And how evilly perceptive Endymion is, noticing that he's drifting away and then Control-Alt-Deleting him.

GOD Helios even speaks like a yuppie vegan chakra cleanser that you meet in line at Whole Foods! XD I didn't read his first line of dialogue too closely at first, and then on second read I SWEAR my yoga instructor has said the same thing about pigeon pose!

Also I 3 that Nephrite is impatient and does not care that it is taking Zoi so long to get up when he was out for what? Days? There are naked maenads to stare at and Zoi's just wasting time!

Also I frigging love this fic so much that I'm offering my firstborn and my bonus check if you would please please introduce Kunzite and then stick an ending, any ending on it, or have it go on to infinity, either way! I promise my firstborn will be enticing, and will be able to cook, unlike his/her mother!

I LOVE. FIC. WANT. MOER.

AH I missed this the first time I read it, but it's interesting that Nephrite remembers his past life but Jadeite doesn't. Guess he didn't drink the Kool Aid as hard (and yes, you should write a fic with that line!)

And yes, bonus points for naked maenads. I utterly love that as probably as beautiful as Elysian is, they prefer to stare at the naked chicks. So much testosterone with no where to go XD

Wouldn't it be awesome for Kunzite to finally appear and be all "OMG WTF WHERE AM I?" and the other three just "Eh. Calm the eff down. Check THAT out." "Oh. Ah." I think that this would be a great way to introduce Kunzite to afterlife holding cell!

"Perhaps longer"

AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

And Helios saw him. SAW. HIM. I know watching the naked chicks has a higher, nobler purpose, but to my base mind, it was just LOL-worthy, and awesome, and every part of this Elysian fic is perfect. PLEASE honey, PLEASE WRITE MORE OF IT. I BEG YOU, REALLY!

I feel like there aren't enough words to sing your praises or glow all over your work because there wasn't one part of this fic that wasn't PERFECT. I can't tell you how much I loved that he tried FOR DAYS to shove things up Neph's nose until he woke up, and really, what else is there to do in Elysian?

And then Neph goes back to sleep like "Eff this I'm out." XD XD XD

Oh Honey, please tell me you've given serious though to continuing this. Remember, you never put in Kunzite yet, and that must be rectified! Think of the possibilities of what they could do to him while he's asleep!

oh bye bye snarkiness.

I always imagined Elysian having that quality. Always calming and by no means lewd.

but i admit the physical desires extending longer than others made me laugh. guys must always have their pride. :P

i loved how it was juxtaposed with calmness however. You're just very good with juxtaposition in general. :D

The ending two lines makes me want to throw myself on the ground and beg you to put an ending on this. I know, I know, it's not a fic, as you made very clear..but it could be an AWESOME one, in your hands!

I love love love the fact that Jadeite can't remember anything pre-Beryl, and doesn't even think that is strange. He drank the Kool-Aid, and hard.

Please? FOR ME? END THIS! Introduce Kunzite! Make them reflect and remember stuff! MORE VEGAN HELIOS! MORE YOGA! MORE COWBELL!

This is going to be very interesting.

Helios exasperated and sulked! Then again that was quite expected having to deal with a snarky and clueless Jadeite.

Snarky Jadeite is adorable. I loved that there is some childishness in his flawed logic.

Helios is put off isn't he? He wants to be dramatic but Jadeite is too much of a minimalist.

Ah, well at least he isn't evil. Just snarky. But it's kind of charming.

And Helios acting like a sulky kid is pretty cute. Seems like Elysian will be pretty fun with the two of them. Male-bonding time? :P

"He looked at the altar boy whom he decided to associate with a nutrition expert and figured that this place could certainly be vegan."

XD XD XD! I seriously had to turn my head and laugh at the wall when I read this at work today, and I just re-read it and laughed again. Elysian is vegan! It makes so much sense now...with the unicorns and shrine and all! What, yoga class is at noon? Chakra readings on the hour? Detox body cleanses and crystal alignments? Poor Jadeite, maybe it is hell for him after all :D

I mock because I love, of course *does yoga* *shops at Whole Foods* *uses divacup*

This means you're going to tack another part on this, right? Because if I recall correctly, you stopped right before Kunzite. This must be amended!

definitely in the mood for snarky. And Jadeite was the best choice as a vessel for snarkiness too.

Definitely doesn't sound like dark Jadeite at all. A much more loveable Jadeite. I love how he thinks.