Great job!

This story is awesome. I enjoyed that they are both having difficult lives and find comfort in each other. It's also so in character for Naruto and Sasuke to misunderstand each other. The scene where Naruto throws sasuke over his shoulder like a fireman was hilarious. As for the lemon scene, I think you did a great job in setting a more romantic mood instead a slutty one.

Thanks for sharing!

This story was near perfect, and most likely would be perfect, if perfection was possible to attain... I'm rambling, but even so, I wanted to inform you of my love for this story!

The lemon was surprisingly delicious, especially for being your first! I love the sex scenes in which the two are displaying love and affections, caring about the state of the other, rather than going at it hard just for the "feel-good."

There was only very slight OOC, and the only error I found in this, script-wise, was minor spelling errors. Other than that, everything was excellent! Love it!

-Randy-kun

THIS was your first lemon scene! I can't believe it. That was in the top ten best lemons I've ever read. I've read a lot of them. Just trust me on that fact, okay? Anyway, getting off the topic of my perverted tendencies...I absolutely love this fic. I stumbled upon it, and I'm so glad I did. You're a brilliant writer, even though I wont disagree that the characters were, in fact, a bit OOC. But, it was your first Naruto fanfic so that's okay. I've seen WAY worse, trust me. The love was fresh and cute, it had the right amount of drama, and even though a perverted Orochimaru is not high on my list of favorite things, (who am I kidding, he's always perverted?), I think he was a very clever character to use in the story. Oddly enough, he kind of grew on me...never repeat that to anyone, please. In conclusion, I'm so sorry for the long review but I needed to express my delight in finding a wonderful fic after so long. It's definitely a one-in-one-hundred type of statistic. Your fic was a beautiful, lemony, heart-felt oasis to my dehydrated yaoi-fangirl self. Thanks for letting me experience it!

-ZM

I love this story!

And don't doubt your lemon writing skills, this is one of the best I've ever read (and I spend most my time looking for stories this great).

It's so nice to find an author who knows how to write and has a great plot!

gemswillfall

I seriously don't know What your talking about! This has to be one of the best fan fics i have read! :)It loooooved it! The lemon was good to and wasn't slutty at all! :D I can tell that they weren't doing it just to have sex but to show the other there love for one another :DD I hope to see more narusasu stories from you cause your good at writing them :P ( by the way sometimes OCCness is good!) P:

This was a great one shot.. I really enjoyed reading it... the lemon was good too.. Thank you so much for writing this :D :D :D :D

*sigh* I just want to say:

1. I very much like long fic, and even if this is just a one shot, it's quiet a long and satisfying one

2. the lemon scene is beautiful, not overly graphic but somehow sweet.

3. I love a lil angsty NaruSasu story, so another point for you.

The last but not least, thank you for writing this very lovely and beautiful story...

WoW this is so awesome!. THe first half was getting more and more melancholy by the minute i read. I found that their problm was not just misinterpretation but also lack of communication . I really love how you tell the story and the love scenes had all the emotions and erotic needed.

ThanX

Awe I Loved It! Hehe When Naruto Said Orochimaru Looked Like A Rapists Corpse I Cracked Up So bad! X3 Good Story! I Liked It ALOT! X3

i really like the plot of this story. stop worrying so much about the lemon, because it was definately one of the better sex scenes that i've read. The ending was cute. all in all a great story! :)

Loved it - the lemon was great! Can't beleive that's your first attempt

I'm a big fan of your Taito, so I was a very happy girl when I got the update that you'd written a NaruSasu.. my other reason to live :3

Look forward to reading more of your writings!

words have so much effect,im glad they didnt break up or come up with over zealous reasons for both of them not calling naruto really needs to get his cell phone back and write down his importaint numbers on a sheet of paper he wont loose easily.

On no! It was very well written in my opinion! I really liked this one-shot!

Wow. Are you sure that was your first one-shot/naruto/lemon? because all were really well written. i love the emotional conflict that occurs thorough most of the story, i love the way the lemon conveyed all those pure yet raging feelings, and the light-hearted ending.

In other words: This story ROCKED! _-