Wow, really cool and full of suspense! I really hope you didnt discontinue this one, because its awesome. I hope part two is coming up soon- I cant wait!

Very intresting

Update soon okay? I would love to see the ending!

That took forever to read, haha. Is the next update soon?

I dont write rewiews much butthis MOST definatly deseves the credit. the chapters are long and keeps readers intreagued, the creative stroyline and the way you plot it together is amazing ive red DBZ fanfics but you rech the top 5 in my rankins.

hope you update soon

i look foward to it

Wow. Now this is one awesome story. I only recently stumbled upon the DBZ fandom, and I can hardly believe I managed to stumble across this so soon.

Most of all the things I like about this fic is the version of Vegetasei you've created. It's so detailed, and together with how involved and descriptive the writing is, it really creates such a clear image of the scenes in my head it's like watching a movie. Your characterizations are unique and interesting, and your plot is intriguing to the highest degree. What's more, your grammar and spelling is excellent- always a good find.

Great work, and I'm looking forward to reading more, whenever it may be written!

-Lady Bad Luck

Loving this story, seems like it might be an epic, I hope so :)

Loads of interesting bits like the Saiyan legend, Picollo in Bardock's past (and working for Frieza no less!), the way you describe the families and relations, Kakarot being low power yet maybe not for long (I'm thinking maybe this is one time when Bardock is wrong about who is the chosen one), Frieza and Zarbon interaction, in fact everything!

Your chapters are so long I forget what I want to say in my review by the time I get to the end! I'll have to take notes next time :)

Please update soon.

What a long chapter! Kept me gripped though and can't wait for the next one :)

One word ?

Gyah.

I know this story deserve much much more, but this is all I can utter at the moment.

I love this story! I can't wait to see it continue.

WONDERFUL! Well done, I'm not a yaoi fan but you've hooked me.

Amazing! Great plot develpment, really excited about the romance to come!

Whoa, impressive work! I'm loving how developed this story is, with all the subplots adding interest to the main storyline. And your character development is amazing, too! Your writing style is nice and flows smoothly, so it's really easy to read and just get lost in the story. Your grammar is also good; I wasn't distracted by any mistakes. The story itself is fantastic so far, I totally adore it and can hardly wait to read part II! I'll definitely be watching for updates!

Very good start! Looking forward to this story it sounds great update soon.

This story is very well written with interesting characterization. I'm overjoyed to have found it. Definitely going on my favorites list. You deserve so much more reviews. D:

I'm looking forward for part II. :'3