Omfg so hot.

Awesome!, You planning on expanding it in more chapters or just reimagining it? Cuz either way ill read it forever. I really love this story i come back every other week to read it because of how amazingly youve written it.

it was a good death.

Holy shit, really? That's fantastic!

This was genuinely incredible. I am almost sad I hadn't found this deliciously wonderful story sooner. I know many years have passed since this story, but if by chance you see this, know you made a sad man very happy for the time it took to enjoy this. Thank you. Best wishes, Sad.

Lawd Jayzus this is good writing

Wow, great writing.

[BIG TIME SENSUALITY part II]

Hey there again, KhaledA ! (sorry i missed the final "A" of your alias in my previous review... ' )

I just forgot a few things in said previous review, so here's finishing the job... and hoping i don't forget anythingelse this time ! I had to review chapter 8 for this addition, as one cannot review the same chapter (e.g. 9) TWICE, as per FF rules !

I actually found the last chappy, chapter 9, quite interesting. Are you into horoscope stuff yourself, or just felt like putting this here ? Just asking, coz my Mum is into horoscope and kinda raised a bit of interest in me... So, i did find that correlation bw characters and their signs (bw their nature and their zodiacal identity) pretty original and appealing. And also with the link with the planets, hence explaining at last the title of your fiction. Really interesting conclusion.

And yes, Jinx, i am an Aquarian / Aquarius as well (to answer your question to the reader in chappy 9) . And yes, what you say / is written about Aquarians applies to me, except maybe the "always-taking-notes part (i don't do that so much). And yes, Scorpios certainly are one of the most demanding / difficult signs of the zodiac...

I particularly appreciated what you say about Scorpios changing their partners / friends for the best, and also about their NEVER forgetting anything. That has to be fascinating, right ?

Last, i wondered if the girls would return to that mysterious place (lair of Veronica) one day, and if Jinx would go ahead and do it for Raven. My guess would be that they didn't... but after all, i have no way of knowing what the future holds for our lesbian couple !

Oh, and i must say i also liked the relationship Jinx-Ben. Pretty cool ! I notably enjoy his sentence when he mentioned her sexual preference, and which was sth like : "You know, Jen, for a lesbian, you sure know how to make a man happy." I appreciate their being friends, and him being a bit like a confident to her.

I am delighted to have read another great Raven X JInx sTTory (luv that couple !), and another both sweet and mysterious - therefore fascinating - lesbian love story. And renew my gratitude vibes to ya, dear Khaleda !

Keep up the (VERY) good work !

Take care !

/ Léo \\\\\

[BIG TIME SENSUALITY]

Eh yes, since you're such a Björk fan, I thought it appropriate a title, eh ?

Hi there, Khaled !

After a very slight disappointment wz last sTTory I read from ya (HB), here's back to the highest heights with this extremely qualitative fiction that, to be honest, hypnotized me.

Yes, it did.

No less.

This lesbian romance is an immense success, a brilliant achievement, an undebatable attainment, a total "scorer", and is more than all good in my book : it is EXCELLENT in my book, really !

The intensity of the moments bw Jinx and Raven, the fascinating aura of mystery surrounding Raven, the unsettlement/nervousness of the feline (who still tried her best to look cool and cocky, yet had great difficulty in succeeding and thus being as cheeky as her old self), the enigma in which the plot developed, the captivating game unfolding bw the girls, the incredible power of the looxxxx, especially Raven's on Jinx (and especially her staring at her pink-haired love during their "special evening" with Veronica and Sara), all these and more... are so magnetic, so fascinating, so enthralling that I could hardly resist starting another chapter as soon as I had read the last word of the last one.

I bet you remember that line from Björk's ENJOY : "It magnetizes me to it". Well, guess what ? That's exactly what your story does to me : I'm iron filings, PLUTO is my magnet, and I won't even try to counter its fantastic power of attraction. Yes, I'm in love with this fiction here, just like I have been earlier with VIOLENTLY HAPPY. This... this is sheer delight, this is endless shivers of pleasure (although they aren't as intense as the girls's shivers of pleasure ;D ), this is a tornado of literary rapture. All this mystery, all this intensity, all this tension and urge... and all this love ! Wonderful, "just wonderful" !

The one-to-last chapter was a cathedral of arousal, a temple of pleasure, with incredible sensitivity, incredible force, incredible energy... and even ferocity ! A very frontal yet not at all vulgar description of intercourse between two females : blunt depiction of sexual acts, but without the banal and subtle-less terms "p.u.s.s.y." or "c.l.i.t." or "a.s.s." or "c.u.m.m.i.n.g." (if you cannot read coz censorship, jus' lemme know...), only everyday words such as "fingers", "tongue", "deep", "area", "wet", not the slightest vulgar but terribly, deliciously suggestive. And suggesting is immensely rewarding, much much more than putting one's entire bestiality in using crude glossary. So, all in all, a wonder of a chapter, with a splendid description of two loving girls sharing the most intimate moment. I am speechless at such a magnificently intense chapter, definitely one of my favorite with the "special evening".

So, what's not to love in this gem of a story, uh ? Well, I did regret the absence of titles for your chappies. I always find titles interesting, but we agree they're not a necessity. Yet I still regret them. ;) And another regret too, much greater this one : that their intercourse didn't include oral s.e.x. Because I have watched women pleasing themselves with their mouths, and was hypnotized by the slowness some of them do it, very slow, very sweet, taking all their time to give the maximal pleasure and make that unforgettable moment last as long as possible. Sharing it simultaneously (69) is even more powerful as it means reciprocal pleasure here and now, but I didn't think of this for this chapter, yet it's true that I would have loved each of the girl offering the nicest, slowest, deepest c.u.n.n.i.l.i.n.g.u.s. to the one she love. Because I prefer the pleasure brought by a tongue than by a finger : more subtle and sweet in my opinion. :D

So, in conclusion, my boundless gratitude and warmest thanxxxx to ya for crafting such a jewel of a fiction, that is up there with VIOLENTLY HAPPY, two of your best worxxxx obviously. You are very very talented, dear Khaled, and it is both a pleasure and an honor to read your stuff. I feel privileged, and I once again owe you for that. THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU my dear, this is great great story writing, and such a magnetizing gem with such a magnetizing Raven, one of the most interesting Raven's I've ever read about ! (...and trust me, I've read A LOT of sTTories involving Raven ! ;) )

Bravo, bravo, bravo and bravo for this amazing, awesome, wonderful achievement ! Top class !

Take care and read ya soon in another review... coz be sire I'm starting a new story of yours in just a few hours, when I wake up...! :DDDD

Hugsies, Great Authoress !

Léo

I wish I could brain wash myself to forget the story just so I can have the thrill of reading this for the first time again

Holy shit. You are a god/goddess at dialogue. The tension and sexiness oozes off the pages, as well as the sassyness and personality of both characters. Wow. Its hard to find a real good author on this site and when you do it needs to be celebrated. You, my dear author, now belong to that exclusive club in my books. I almost want to write a story with a similar set up as this one now (coming back after all these years, former heroine and former vilaness...) THAT's how much I'm liking this. Bravo! Bravo. :)

Well. I have to say, this is a nice change from the norm. The writing is very mature and well executed. Plus, adults? That's a nice change, even including a touch of melancholy longing for days gone by (and who doesnt hate their job from time to time?). Great chapter one. Hope you have more stories because in just one short chapter I think I'm a fan of your writing style, it is damn good so far

I felt a little like jinx at times while reading this, especially at the bdsm club. I kept thinking this is amazing but at the same time this is so very wrong. I kept going from putting my phone down and trying to forget this story to trying to read the whole thing in one day (i ended up doing just that by the way). You are quite skilled at writing. First time i have ever read a somewhat domination submission oriented fic,honestly the closest i have come to this story is Winter Girl by sawachika-chan i look forward to reading a couple more of your stories and hope they are of the same or better quality

Sensual, exciting, captivating, throat wrenchingly good. I love this fic, found this way back and still love it to today 3

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I listen to this while reading, felt like it really mirrored the atmosphere of the story ;)

The best. Simply.