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Aww u should have had teito pull Mikage out of the flour! ... It would've made more sense...(coming from a mikeito fan) AWSOME! anyway! Yep... And

U should've elaborated more... Aaaa but that was two years ago so u r probably WAY better now so... Yea. Ignore this i guess...

Burupya had to ruin it, OH YES! Haha, but he is cute :)

Realt cute story 3 Haluren is the best! 3

Cute * w *... muy ... dulce? X3-jeje -

Beso bye bye: 3

Haha, so cute and funny~! :D I love HakurenxTeito! And Mikage is just to cute. He goes, "BURUPYA!~" and ruins the moment. _~ But I love Mikage anyways. 3

:D

Oh yes, they WILL stop for more icing and batter breaks.

So cute! X3

Terribly adorable! I've only recently gotten into 07 Ghost, but I think this might be my favorite pairing already. XD Quite cute, thanks for sharing it.

((Btw, you're writing isn't bad. Promise. :-P))

~ME~

(Sorry for my bad English :S)

I really like this storie It is really cute and I can imagine them covered with icing and flour... it is so funny. And I really like the way Mikage interruped them. Haha. Maybe it's jealousy ' Or bad luck if he really falls in the bag of flour ' Well, however, I like your fanfic

so cute and fluffy! please write more fics soon!

It's great story.

But I like if teito pairing with ayanami (don't know why) ayanami is cool and evil but sexy and hot too. Bwahahaha...

Thankz

I know the pic you're talking about, lol.

Cute _.

But way too short.

Since you're new, I'll give you a bit of experienced writer pointers.

When writing fanfiction, try to have the word count be over 10. Most people tend to assume that stories with less than 500-9 words aren't well-written. Always aim for a word count of 1,0. This can be accomplished by added more material to a story or stretching out actions.

For example, in this fic, you could've elaborated more on Teito putting a cake in the oven because the way you wrote it made it sound like he put it in the oven and it popped out baked instantly. I can tell you from experience that cakes do not bake that fast, XD.

But you'll get the hang of it! Keep up the good work, this site needs more HakuTei fics! More, I say!

This is so cute!