Honestly, the story is jumping all over the place. Everything is happening way too fast, the characters are incredibly ooc, and the grammar is very patchy. This needs a real cleanup job and a beta.

it's spelled definitely not defiantly

hi there. you have an interesting story going but there are to many discontinuity errors to keep reading... in one of the other chapters Luna was talking to Edward, know he wants to know how she can talk. the chapter before Edward was in school to give Alice his car keys, now he is home before them... I think this story would benefit from a major overhaul. I'll put it on my follow list so I will get an info if you fef around to fo it. cheers!

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Wasn’t Harry 'Hadrian' in the very beginning and not 'Harrison'?

Other than that, there are no other big blunders and the story is really great!

Absolutely brilliant story! Thank you for sharing such an amazing gift, your writing!

Ok story

I'm I right in guessing that all the Cullen children was turn at a certain age? Loved the story

Haha I’m glad they aren’t going to Hogwarts, they would never have been left alone. Grandpa Sev...that’s was awesome.

Didn’t he bring the cribs and everything with him from Privet Drive?

I’m glad he refuses to pay to take the twins. Hopefully he sterilizes Dudley cause if this happened once it’s boubd to happen again.

They should Steriluze Dudley while they are there so this doesn’t happen again. Though if Harry did a blood adoption hopefully the twins would look more like Harry than Dudley.

Haha so cute.

Lol using the vampire excuse...did she not clue into the fact that Carlisle is a doctor and around blood all the time she needs a better excuse.

Lol so far Draco seems to be the only one of the trio that hasn’t needed a medical personnel in the last week...you would have thought that with Voldemort gone Harry wouldn’t have so many health issues lol.