Wow... that was... confusing... I LOVE IT

This is creepy. So very, very creepy. It makes my skin crawl.
Truly the perspective of madness. Very well done.

Oh man, 1st line and it's already creepy.
Though I think she's mentally hurt, not plain crazy...

Wow. Just wow. Most people write Azula as being fine, as if she's never been insane, but you managed to write her as insane, which I know from experience, is a very hard thing to do. Even though you say it was only an experiment, I think it worked out very well. The speed at which the story was going, the repetition of words... Somehow as much as it didn't seem to make sense, the message was fairly clear (Makes you wonder if it's 'cause you think that way as well, when you read something like this and it's so clear). Anyways, very good, continue writing!

Amazingly written, dark and captivating! 3

I really really liked it, you did a great job. The repetition and the tempo are just amazing, and it really flows well. I really get the feeling I'm there, without knowing where I have been taken.

Loved it!

*twitch*

Nuts Azula. Someone actually bothered remembering that Azula is absolutely bonkers. Forgive me while I recover from the shock of reading a well-written psychopath on fanfiction net. Hardly ever happens, these days-especially in Avatar, what with the OHZUKO, MY WATER JUST EXTINGUISHED YOUR FIRE, LOOK, GOOD SYMBOLISMHARHAR stuff. I've clearly been reading the wrong ship.

...I'm not going to bother talking about why Azula and Sokka make no sense, because it doesn't actually matter.

What can I say about this? For stream of thought, it's actually unusually absorbable. Normally that stuff just seeps right through your head without making it to the brain-gets stuck somewhere around the cochlea. The vague pattern of command-randomthoughts-command-background et cetera worked well. The "each section starts with the same grammatical function" sort of thing can get irritating quickly, but you managed to avoid the pitfalls and come out on the better side (by better side, I mean "very far ahead"). This is pretty unusual, I'm sure you know, and despite being short, holds its own as a story. Fire-water-glass symbolism was very nicely done.

Overall, brava. :D

~IGC t DM

(Sarcophagus, for TMB's review race)

I absolutely love this (:

I'm not really sure what's happening either but I do like how you made her into a windup toy. Which is exactly what she is. Just a toy that her father controls. He winds he up and lets her go where ever he wants, to do what ever he wants her to do.

Well... that's how I see their relationship to be, but I had never actually thought of it like a toy.

I am so glad I took a chance and read this. The style is so unique and I haven't read anything like it, but I'm glad I did. I love the rambling Azula, I think you've captured her insanity very well. Good job!

Oh, I do like this, even if I couldn't quite work out what was going on, lol. But then, since this appears to be told from a deranged Azula's perspective, that's probably a good thing. :D

Hmm, I'm not sure this so much about Sokka trying to fix Azula, as it is about Azula trying to break Sokka. But either way, it's dark, cryptic and very good! )