That was pretty good. Too bad it's so short

It was a good start I believe you would be a great amazing wrighter if you put your mind to it and I couldn't find any errors because of how deep into the story I was so I hope you keep writing.

Updaaaate

Sounds cool you should really continue it! Plz!

you should keep writing! you have a great start on the story, and i bet if you kept writing, it would just get better and better! I'm definetly adding you to author alert and story alert, and adding you to faves!-i can't wait till you post another chapter!

keep makin' masterpeices!

-ninjacats-

~ja bai bai!~

its a good story..i wonder how it would end if it wasnt a oneshot hmm..

OH PLEASE CONTINUE/...OH (GOES BLIND)

i really liked this story. Normally i dont like it when the twins have an interest in an OC but this was very well done. i hope your not finished with this 'cos i think it would do even better with another chapter. keep up the good work :)

This chapter is really good! I don't really see and grammar problems or anything. It's funny cause when i'm reading i was thinking 'Riiko is sorta like me, i mean, like i think ow on myself a lot.' lol.

great story/chapter