I love this! So funny...

For some reason, they remind me of Elphaba and Glinda from Wicked.

Nice work

that ending was nothing short of lovely, or is it just me? there is so much pain in Mag's life that no official repo! production could reflect, but you made a marvelous attempt at reading into her soul.

xoxo

Oh, Mag, you have no idea just how sane you really are.

I really like the way you ended the story on an ironic note-Mag thinks she'll never get to meet Shilo, and yet, she hears Shilo crying upstairs and thinks she's imagined it. Oh, if only she'd followed Nathan...*sigh* Perfect way to create a cliffhanger and set the stage for the future. I swear I heard the opening notes of Chase the Morning when she got to the gate.

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-Weasley-

ps-I'm on chapter 20 of my own fic if you'd still like to read and review. :)

YOUR LEAVING ME W/ A CLIFFHANGER! lol I love this plz add to it soon 3

And so, the struggle begins...Very lovely chapter here, and kudos as always for using Marni to make me smile. Hope to see more when more is available,

Weasles

Gasp! I reread the chapter just because I do that, and it still left my heart pounding and scary! I love this story! I can't wait for the next chapter!

By the way, it's Tawnyleaf, not Tawny Leaf. Long story... ;D

I was a little thrown off by the shifts between past and present tense here, but other than that, I'm glad to see the dark drama start to slip in through the cracks. Just when a person thinks life is perfect, something happens to toss everything off balance, hmm?

ps-Those 'lovely children' cuss like sailors and play with sharp objects. ;) Too bad Marni couldn't have been there to see Amber's tantrum.

OMG! OMGOMGOMG! My heart is pounding so hard right now... Excellent story! Absolutely wonderful. It explains the feelings I always seemed to get from Mag (you know, fear), and is very believable. I can't wait for the next chapter!

"All I needed to hear was the word 'we'."

That line alone tells me why I love this story so much-these two are in it for the long haul. Everybody should have a friendship like this.

Is the surgeon's name Nathan...? XD

Poor Mag should have taken the Z after all, but hey, that's just me.

More, please? *puppy eyes*

I can sense the trouble coming...

"he smile on his face was one of a child opening a present on Christmas, and getting exactly what they wanted."

That sentence was epic. I can sense the evil rolling off him in WAVES! Seriously. Marni and Mag together are written exactly as two best friends should be written. It's perfect. I act the same way around my friends, so it is very realistic. I like how you made her first encounter with sight negative. And, thank you very much!, you just gave me an idea.

I would have changed only one thing, and that was how visually you write. Now it won't be as much as a problem now that Mag can see, but before it was a little confusing.

I'm patiently waiting for the next chapter!

You certainly are doing a good job with this story. It's still lighter, and I like how you Mag very touch/taste/sound oriented. It gives her a new aspect that we don't see a whole lot. I also like how Marni seems to actually be semi "in love" with Rotti, it makes for an easier explanation. Rotti is just a slimeball lol. I'm interested!

Excellent job on making a medical miracle sound so horrendous. Poor Marni's trying to be happy for Mag, and Mag's having one dark omen after another stare her in the face. Nice job on that! XD

I just have one little suggestion..."And though Mag could take fine care of herself, there are many times when assistance is needed." This kinda switches from past to present tense, so maybe that's something to be careful of so the reader remembers the story is happening in the past. Hope that helps.

Keep up the awesome writing,

-Weasley-

This is intriguing! I like the human element you gave to each character, adding your own twist to the story, adding your own little tweaks to their personalities. All the while, you kept a little humor in it for comic relief. I can sense where this is going though. I doubt it will stay so upbeat for long.

Waiting patiently for your next chapter!

Marni the tomboy? EXCELLENT. XD I half-expected her to punch Mag on the arm, but this works too, even though I bet it stings.

Great job, also, on avoiding the use of the words 'see', 'saw', and 'look' where Mag is concerned. Someone made their blind character in a rpg randomly see in one post, and that totally defeated the purpose...so I'm glad for some continuity in a story like Mag's.

And finally...Marni is super for not getting upset over Mag hitting her back. I'd be a little weepy if it were me. XD But hey, it's all good. Keep up the great work!

-Ivy-