I have loved every second of your story! Amazing work so far! I look forward to reading the next.

Hi,

I was rereading a bit of this story and found something that was removed in one of the early chapters, maybe this one, that I think you should have kept in. In Chapter 4, Cara mentions a dream about various legendaries. Since that sets up the story, would you be able to add that back in? Thanks.

I totally forgot this fanfiction was why I became to attached to naming Abra Kinesis haha! In my Pokemon Leaf Green I have a Kadabra named Kinesis and a Gyrados named Leviathan

Ever since reading this fic when I was younger, now I always name my Magikarp Leviathan! I'm glad to be rereading this again

10 yr olds don't talk like this :/

I thought it was amazing how the unown came and stopped Kevin

Quite some time since I first read this storyand I still love it.
It might be a bit easy written... why would that be something to complain about actually? I just wish this would be longer! well, I'm gonna reread the series now :3

I love your idea of a Mew mysteriously appearing.
I feel so glad Cara caught a Pikachu, those are rare in Unova. (My main Pokemon Game is Black 2 so I base myself in my stories as him. Except the Gyarados' in my other pokemon story, I don't have one, though I have a Magikarp.)

awe. that was nice of yellow and cara to help out eon and uber

yeah! they saved mew

yeah! kinesis came with backup to save cara and mew

Yellow's my absolute favorite! I can't believe she's in here!

I enjoyed the story, the battles were entertaining enough and Mew encounters prooved to be super cute and a major event to keep reading and looking foward to. Decent humor and plenty of "awwww... 3" moments. The camioes were cool, and team rocket was awesome!

The writing was well done, and I can tell you had fun doing it!

Some things were hard to wrap my head around the fast captures were really too much to comphrehand, Hyperbeam twice in a row was confusing - it never was given a second glace or was never posed as a question to lance. And I can just imagine the king of the isle just standing here observing these humans converse confused and thinking something along the lines of: "What the hell is this all about? What am I doing here... Jed isn't realy talking to me at all!"

Plotwise it was decent, but I have concerns about it falling short to what I expected to happen in the direction it was going. Mew was a huge factor in this story and she wasn't there to finish it up, I expected for them to become quite close friends and to help her through abit of the pokemon league, or help her sort out the Potagonists nerves for the Elite 4.

Basicly I expected Mew to show up a little more in the latter Acts to be a good friend and provide support or comfort in her own way, perhaps provide abit of comic releif and some "awwww... thats cute" moments.

In summery I looked back upon the story fondly and had these thoughts in my mind:

"WOW, that was a roller coaster with some awesome content... but I hope mew is okay, she was in alot of pain and she promissed to keep in contact.. maybe she's in trouble again? I wished we got to see more of her...
I'm a little confused taking into account the King's predicament in the end..."

Oh noooooo

Oh, Polaris! Seriously! You write very well! Much better than I do! Out of all of the Pokémon, Ponyta and Rapidash are my favorite!