loved it super sweet

Awwww! That was sweet! I was worried Shilo was going to die, but that was great! Fave!

I love the sweet if somewhat snarky graverobber.

I would like more! You have a really good writing style!

Miki

I liked it..you have some really good lines in there, good job. )

It may not have gone the way you planned, but I like it. It's cute! I love me some Grilo!

Stories don't always go as planned. I liked it though. Hopefully you will write more. :)

loved it! i love Graverobber/ Shilo... loved the hintings at Graverobber's intentions of helping her. BRAVO!

Aww super great! I latched onto this pairing immediately after watching the movie as well and this was written beautifully! Graverobber is ridiculously sexy, you're completely right .o

This was very good. I found myself having the characters sing their lines, thinking that it might sound weird, but every line fit perfectly in my head as a song. Great job! And I agree with The Squash, perfect ending.

That was just super cute. Loved it.

I like it. A lot. Sometimes fanfiction writers, myself included, veer into waxing poetic about mysterious attraction and miscommunications. Here, while Shilo is genuinely uncertain, Graverobber isn't just protecting her, he's maintaining his necessary machismo by not telling her how he feels.

I have no doubt in this piece that he'd love to jump her bones, but he gets that it's neither the time nor the place, while staying in character.

About the 'lame' ending, I think your problem is that you tried to hard to nail home the point of the piece. You've already shown us that she's going to have trouble and he'll be there, you don't need to tell us, too. With a strong, dialogue-driven piece like this one, it's usually best just to cut off at the final gut-stab line, which in this case is Graverobber's last line.

Awesome Grilo fic! Thanks for writing it! Great portrayal of who Shilo is at the end and her potential.

ShannaK

wo! coolies! damn,i love repo! it was great, it wasnt a shitty ending. it was great, gives u options... just my opinion.

I really liked how you wrote this story. I think you should try to add to it. The ending may not have gone as planned, but you never know where the story might go if you try to write more ;)