*waves* I have come! I have come as-*brick'd before bad quoting can come to fruition*

This was quite good! You did very well, especially considering you used the first person. The third person is usually more eloquent and easier to manage, but you did just as well with the first. -

The presentation was very good and the descriptions were well composed. You wrote about Faize losing his marbles perfectly! XD

My only suggestions (because I'm a pain in the ass) is that if you write about Faize again, keep in mind that his vocabulary consists of mainly large, at times confusing, and four syllable words. XD In the English version (I'd imagine Japanese too, but I have no idea...) he always speak in an overly formal manner.

Anyway, good work! :D I especially liked the phrase "endless ocean of the night sky."

The Final Hikari

Wow that was sad I love Faize and Edge as a couple shame there are so little but yeah you capture Faize angst side but yeah Good work on this one!.