| Reviews for I Love You On A Clear Day, After The Rain |
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   Royal Detective chapter 1 . 9/21/2013 This is so romantic! |
| Nagi-Chan96 chapter 1 . 9/6/2012 aaawwww that was a cute and romantic story. i love it! |
| Cute story chapter 1 . 7/21/2012 This is really cute! I was just looking for a Silentshipping fanfics, and your's came up! I'm glad I read it. |
| P.O.J.A chapter 1 . 10/2/2010 This was a really sweet fic! The title really did remind me of something that happened in Tokyo Mew Mew (so I had to smile when I read it in your author's note). Overall it was beautiful and sad, and totally romantic towards the end. Very believable writing! The only "critique" I would give is paragraphing. The dialogue could have been separated from the rest of the narration to make it stand out stronger. Otherwise, no complaints with grammar or spelling :) Great job with this, especially for a first fanfic! Sincerely, P.O.J.A _ |
| Khrystal chapter 1 . 9/9/2010 this is so cute :) aw |
| Mirokusonlybabe chapter 1 . 10/16/2009 Great job |
| Erune chapter 1 . 9/15/2009 Aw! So sweet and cute X) You're great! |
| dolphindiaries50 chapter 1 . 9/9/2009 That was so sweet. You're an amazing writer. |
| Gryffindor's Goddess chapter 1 . 8/30/2009 Good work :) |
| ohmahgosh chapter 1 . 7/9/2009 i love it! it's so cute. MORE! MORE! MORE! |
| Writer Elsewhere chapter 1 . 7/5/2009 Good job for a first time :). |
| Journey Maker chapter 1 . 7/3/2009 I absolutely loved this story.. |
| Blueshadows2010 chapter 1 . 7/3/2009 That was really cute! There are so little Seto/Shizuka stories out there. So congrats on making your first story here on Fanfiction a Silentshipping one! Just a little note, when different people are talking it would be easier for the reader if you would start a new sentence. For example your last paragraph when they're saying they love each other: "He rested his head on mine, and whispered “I love you” with a soft tone, my eyes widened and my heart broke out into a tremendous beat, Seto was so close he could probably feel my heart pounding. Tears began to flow from my eyes, I cried in happiness, and I could feel his grip tighten in comfort. “I love you too” I whispered, back. A gentle breeze scattered the cherry blossoms, the pink sky, the glowing sun, the fresh scent after a downpour…it was beautiful, on a clear day after the rain." Its nothing bad to have people talk in the same paragraph but it confuses the readers sometimes. Once again it was a really sweet story and for your first it wasn't that bad. Though if you do need any help with future stories such as structure it would be wise to get a beta! A lot of authors are one, myself included, so if you ever need help there are alot of us out there! ~Jessica Welcome to Fanfiction! |
