This is a wonderful story! Loved it so much .. It could have pretty sure happened on the show!

I think you are a very good writer, however the show did have a reason for putting Fin with Olivia and not Elliot - he has more UC experience. But, it's fanfiction, so good job :)

This was a really good one shot on what Elliot's reaction would be to finding out that his partner had almost been raped. I wished that on the show she had told him, because it would have been wonderful to actually see his reaction on the screen on the television, you know? Anyways, keep up the amazing work, and keep on writing! :D

I think this explained a missing scene at the end of that ep. Thanks for sharing.

Wow. This was a very well written story! You're a good writer! It was short, but precise! And the characters were, well, very in character! I liked it allot and adding it to favorite right away!

I also wrote a post undercover fanfiction called "Control, Captain Harris returns" if you're interested! :-)

Great story!

love it! you are just so talented :) keep it up!

Now that was absolutely beautiful. I was on the edge of my seat, reading their words out loud to myself, picturing the whole thing as I went. It was so vivid!

"Before he could stop it, before he even knew it was about to erupt, the low guttural yell pierced the locker room, ripped from his throat by the raw emotions rising up and swirling around him. Emotions threatening to suck him into a deep, dark abyss...His chest was on fire, burning, trying to pull in enough air to calm himself...His head began to pound; each beat of his heart, pumping blood furiously, bringing with it another hammering blow. The pain in his head was excruciating, yet it was nothing compared to the pain that ripped and clawed at his heart now that he knew what Olivia had endured."

Let me just say WOW. That was amazing, definitely my favorite part of the story. It's so painful, so agonizing, so Elliot! My goodness! It sounds like he's an animal, wounded and dying! Those words you use are perfect imagery, metaphors, whatever! Guttural, for instance, makes me think of, say, a wolf growl or something like that. You go so deep into the primal words, the animal-like blunt words, getting straight to the heart of the matter without fluffy uselessness everywhere, hitting the bull's eye over and over and over again!

*Ahem* So, yes. Excellent writing. I wasn't sure if Olivia should get more upset when she realized Elliot had gone behind her back. I mean, that would have been interesting to see, but I guess she was more concerned for her partner's mental state than her own (as usual). I wonder what she'll have to say to Fin, though. Surely that betrayal of his would have some sort of repercussions, big or small...?

Well, it's your story. So, because it's your story, I have a question now. Was that a one-shot, or are you going to continue it?

I saw the title and the descripition and thought "Ah an Selview story... I love them. Lets read" and than I saw your name and thought "THAT MUST BE A GREAT STORY"

And it is! So I hope you'll continue? Or is this the end of the story. It defininetely could be but you also could write more... hmm :D

This is a story I just happened to find - and let me tell you, i am SO glad that I did find it! This is REALLY gooD! I cant wait for an update! Update soon!

Whoa. Absolutely amazing work! The details, thought processes of the characters, and realistic dialogue leave me wanting more! Great work and keep on writing!

-Melissa

Awesome story! Keep up the great work.

I have read many stories about what happened at Sealview, and this is by far one of the best.

And what you said about them being interrupted when things got too intense or dramatic, I totally agree. It sucks. lol

Please continue, but if you don't, I understand. Sometimes it's just better to stop and leave the rest to the imagination of the readers. )