Amei a história! D

good way to end the story.

This story made me "wow" :P it was really good.

Ek! I wish this chapter of the manga really ended like this. But hey I can't complain. Then the manga would have ended sooner. I can't wait for their first kiss! For now i just have to keep dreaming and watching fanfics. So thank you for writing this! -

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Respect the reviewers. Not all reviews will strictly praise the work. If someone rightfully criticizes a portion of the writing, take it as a compliment that the reviewer has opted to spend his/her valuable time to help improve your writing.

Everyone here is an aspiring writer. Respect your fellow members and lend a helping a hand when they need it. Like many things, the path to becoming a better writer is often a two way street.

Use proper textual formatting. For example: using only capital letters in the story title, summary, or content is not only incorrect but also a disregard for the language itself.

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Proofread all entries for grammar and other aspects of writing before submission. 'Hot off the press' content is often riddled with errors. No one is perfect but it is the duty of the writer to perform to the best of his/her ability.

Respect the reviewers. Not all reviews will strictly praise the work. If someone rightfully criticizes a portion of the writing, take it as a compliment that the reviewer has opted to spend his/her valuable time to help improve your writing.

Everyone here is an aspiring writer. Respect your fellow members and lend a helping a hand when they need it. Like many things, the path to becoming a better writer is often a two way street.

Use proper textual formatting. For example: using only capital letters in the story title, summary, or content is not only incorrect but also a disregard for the language itself.

I loved the story very much. Thanks for sharing it with us.

So cute! It was excellent even though it was short. It really fit.

WOW..what a happy ending *PLEASE* i hope this happens in the manga ...so wonderful they had kids itll be a beautiful ending and i love it the kids looks just like them *EXCELLENT* AND LOVE YOUR STORY *SALOME* KEEP IT GOING

ikutoJS *LOVE AND KISSES*

i know what you mean. it's addictive to write kids into any story. i really liked the end it was sweet

THAT WAS SO FUNNY TO ME WHEN REN CALLED KYOKO BY HER FIRST NAME AND KYOKO THOUGHT THOSE WERE PRAYERS COMING FROM HIS LIPS *PLEASE* CONTINUE WITH THIS STORY

i absolutly LOVE it! i would write more but it is 12:00 a.m and i am trying not 2 wake my parents. plz update soon!

Oh, so this would've been the other path those two could've taken...Hehe, nice. *Thumbs up*

Fireworks much, and very explosive ones to boot. ;)

I loved it!