Is this the story that I have spent so long looking for?!

It is! This story is so good that it has actually been haunting me lately and I have gone through so many pages and stories in the fandom to find it.

I can't explain the relief I now feel now that I have found it!

Alyss

OMG, I have never cried so much in one story. But I couldn't put it down. I was just sobbing and reading and crying and sniveling, but it was beautiful! Well, not the snot and tears, but everything else!

I was sobbing through the last few chapters... that was a very cruel thing to do. I absolutely loved the story.

Omg this story has made me cry so much- rather awkward cause I'm in an airport. Wait, did you seriously start this in 6th grade?! That's crazy! You're REALLY good for that age. Your story is 20 tines mine, and I'm a 10th grader.

Cleon's really being a jerk to his wife. She's not mean- she just loves him.

No offense or anything, but you really need to edit the grammar. I love this story, but it needs worthy grammar.

No special goodbye from Lerant?

I am satisfied. And you really should label this as complete.

So sweet! Except, Uh, when she officially dies, won't it be kinda awkward with two people she loves/loved/whatever?

And the tears got to me! I think it was just before the part of her begging them to not take him away.

Good story, okay plot line but I just can't read anymore because of your grammar. you consistently use "sh/c/would of" which is not grammatically correct in any way. I believe you are mistaking the contraction "sh/c/would've" and abbreviation of "would have" with "of" because I guess they sound similar. It's terribly distracting when you make such blatant errors. Also, try to give your characters more depth and don't let them get OOC. Keep going!

You've got some major grammar issues to deal with. I'd suggest getting a beta reader who can look over your work and fix it before you post. Or even just a friend who you wouldn't mind reading your work.

It's apparent to me by this prologue that Kel's probably pregnant. I'm not sure if you wanted to give it away so soon or if you were going for mysterious, so I just thought I'd let you know that was my first impression.

I loved the ending.

I loved the beginning.

I loved everything in the middle.

Lets just say that your story was wonderful.

I always liked Kel with Dom, but now I am reconsidering that, thanks to your story.

I did not find anything wrong with the wedding.

Sad the fact that all good stories have to end...

Maybe a sequal?

Alyss Mainwaring

I love the ending. It's so cute :)

Ngawwww, taking a break form FF? :(