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Now THAT was cute! Very nice. Even the manga didn't delve enough into Ogiue and Salsa together, I thought.

Of course she'd put her own little spin on it- that's just how Ogiue is, but she still went through with it. This is a sweet little story, and it honestly just shows the feelings that both of them share in private- you really nail Ogiue's character in that she's still not really one to show feelings in the club room to others, it's different when it's just her and Sasahara.

MORE PLEASE

i realy liked this story. haveing read some of the manga and owning season 1&2 of genshiken i would love to see this one in the anime grat job

That was so cute!

OMG this is like the best story i have ever read i think its really adorable plus they are like the cutest together thank you thank you thank you the smile that came from this is the best kinda smile... dont ask 100/10 :P

Very good! I had an idea for a story like this, but this is good.

aw! adorable!

AW...

Okay, whew...

A very cute and sweet fic. Especially the end. It's a Crowning moment of heartwarming all by itself. I like how you made the dialogue so natural, which showed how close the characters are to each other. Heck, you even have Oigue point out that she should have her story flow naturally too, nice touch.

I really can't think of anything critical to say for this fic. Perhaps the fact that it's written in single (or mostly lone) lines instead of paragraphs, but that's common in fanfics.

Another reviewer pointed this out already, but this is a typo that wasn't edited:

“It really feels like they are in love with each other, don't they?”

Should be:

“It really feels like they are in love with each other, right?”

Or something along those lines. The former is a bit unnatural for spoken or proper English (mostly for the last two words), but if you want to point out that they're Japanese and that only Ohno and Saki (along with Angela and Sue) can pull off fluent English, then meh.

In short, well done. Thanks for writing it.

XD i can soo see that happening. I really can. lol

Realy good history.

I'd loved Ogiue since I saw her the first time... you wrote truthful characters, I loved!

I's so sad that we have so few fanfics for Genshiken. There isn't in portuguese (my language)...

Ok, see you!

Good job on the fic this is the first time I've found a Genshiken fic and it captured how the characters truly are together. Though I must say what made the story seem like the manga was the idea of Ogiue's Dojinshi.

Hiya, i must say, this was made to be longer. just my oppinion. im not saying go over to the 18 side of the story... just somehow... yeah make it longer. add a few chapters and who cares about it being a one shot. Im just captivated by this fanfic... REALLY I AM.

Ah. This was really sweet. :)

Also, there was a typo near the end...

“It really feels like they ARE in love with each other, don't they?”

Other than that, I don't recall any flaws. Pretty well written. :D