Thank you :)

This story is very good so far, but you should pull out the "rtards" and "retards". It's very insensitive and unacceptable to use as an insult!

Ahh another thing I don't like, they're all single in Forks and BAM the loves of their lives show up...all at the same time...together. It's so fucking convenient.

And was it just me or was Alice kind of fucking rude to Bella when she interrupted her and Jaspers conversation. She butts in like the cunt she is, belittling Bella and stating that SHE is the owner. Pathetic.

There's a mistake in the second paragraph of Epov. He refers to himself as "a" instead of "I".

So I'm at the end of chapter one and already there are several things that are seriously bothering me. First, Alice has dreams that are prophetic. Second, Alice is too meddling. Third. the boys are movie stars. Fourth, Bella's paragraphs of inner monologue upon seeing Edward. Cant she just be like "damn he's gorgeous? Why all the weird monologuing? So, most everything lol. It seems beneath you if that makes sense, because its well written as far as grammar, punctuation,structure etc. But the dialogue is wanting and the characters are predictable.

Lovely thanks abk

I love how because the man isn't physically holding the baby in the belly, be has absolutely no say in what happens. It isn't fair. Not at all. It's bullshit and I hope that shit changes in real life.

I’ve read your other stories and loved them but this one has a lot of thoughts instead of dialogue and it’s getting to me but I like it :)

Thanks for writing this amazing story!

Loved this!

Awesome story... Thanks so much for sharing! )

This is a really well written story so far. The problem is I find myself schrolling thru the parts not on Edward and Bella. Too much written on the other 2 couples. This is tagged as a Edward Bella story so readers want it more on them.

Great story

I love Anne Frank's quote, However she and her family and the rest of the members of annex did go to Auschwitz, however when the Russians were closing in on the Nazis, Margret and Anne were transferred to Bergen-Bel sen which was a camp in Germany where Anne and her sister died of typhus. the rest of her family except for Otto Frank perished in Auschwitz.
Before the Franks' moved to Holland, my grandmother's aunt and cousin were friends with the family.

Nicely wrapped up. And Renee and James got what they deserved!